I see the pain it grips your face
Alone you await within this place
Seeking a hand to raise you up
To proffer a sip from another’s cup
My grip pulses with my hearts embrace
Yet still you withdraw within your case
Extend your hand and offer it to me
Release your thoughts, set them free
Fantastical realms await your gaze
Stepping through this portals haze
Free your mind, unleash your thoughts
From romance to vast battles fought
Raise your frame from off the floor
Uncross your legs, see what’s in store
Not coming yet, your still not sure
You must know my mind is your cure
Riddled with nonsense it drips and leaks
And often times it slows and squeaks
Seek your future within a dreams confines
Watching carefully as the sun crests and shines
Alas I resign and sit beside your frame
Knowing today shall be just the same
Another darkness we labor to endure
Hoping for you to find your cure
Author notes
Just thinking aloud.
Written February 5th, 2005
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Brill!!
Hmmm..have you swallowed a dictionary? Definately looks like it..lol..You always manage to leave me astounded with the eloquence in your words. (THATS MY BIG WORD FOR TODAY!!!) e l o q u e n c e.....if i keep saying it one day i might find out what it really means..lol...
I really liked this..it had me confused trying to wrok out what is was about..and then i thought..hey..im blond..il never work it out!! Im not meant to understand it..
Normality isnt meant to be understood..The beauty in the world is there for people to look at with their minds open..let alone their eyes. Brilliant poetry. Are you confused yet???..
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* I can see you have alot of comments in this poem and I can see why, I love your style it was very creative and I liked the rhyme you added to it..nicely done!
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Thank you for stopping in and having a read through this write lencio-sunchild. All the time I see folks trapped inside a slow moving rotary of life that they think is normal, not knowing what other fantastical realms await them. If they would only test the boundaries of the hum-drum and enjoy the laughter that is waiting on them. On the flip side of that coin I as well get so focused on the miniscule detials that I overlook the big picture and walk away not knowing the beauty that I missed at times. Once again I thank you for your great comment and hope that others are inspired by my humble random thoughts. Take care
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Uncross your legs, see what’s in store... how truly you are telling this. There are so many out there who got to UNCROSS their legs and see what the world has in store. They got to move. I hope this message gets to many people as possible.
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Yeah I try to slip one in on yall every once in a while. I dont want anyone coming and vandalizing my spread because I havent given the masses anything to read.....lol. I shall try to keep the generator upstairs idling and churning out a few every once in a while. Thank you for dropping by and leaving those kind words, they are appreciated. Take care.
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Oh dear that is a serious issue if your reality is looking a bit like my spittle.....lol. I will have to see if I can send you a bit of flour to thicken your days up a bit.....lol. LMBO about your comment about you not being my morning drool, and here I was getting my hopes up........lol. Ok down boy......lol. Enjoyed your comment, thanx for the laugh and take care.
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Alas I resign and sit beside your frame
Knowing today shall be just the same
Another darkness we labor to endure
Hoping for you to find your cure
Well I'll be... your morning drool looks exactly like my reality!!!! (um... I didn't mean I'll be your morning drool here either) -
Well, I see you have written a new poem. It was also a very good poem at that, keep up the good work my friend. I will be stopping by again another time. Thanks, for sharing...
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brilliant
LMAO ..you're such a friggin nutcase
You know, even though what i said in my comment was true...i'm feeling somewhat redfaced over it.
I should have gone more in depth and not just one longish sentence and a bravo...why, that's shameful!
Your response to my comment made my comment look all the more pitiful..so, i'm going to give you another one in your style of commenting. Ahem...
My dear HammeR this write was absolutely incredible. I do appreciate the time you took to share your inner workings of your oh so complex mind with all of us fortunate enough to call you friend on this here site. This piece touched me in ways i can't even find the words to describe..er...um...dah..hmmmmm...eh...eeek...slurp - to me it seemed not like "someone is distant from you" or "to sample wares of a book" - no sirreebob, this poem has so many different mystifying layers to it. On closer examination the title is what first tipped me off. Untangled thoughts from a tangled mind - oh what a tangled web you weave..now if Queen and Bohb had stayed up half the night trying to anal- lise this write like i've done...they would have come to the same scientific conclusion which i came to -what appears to the untrained eye as a bunch of random thoughts that went awol and escaped through your ears when you awoke from your nap, snorting drooling and repeating this strange line "There's no place like home...there's no place like home" is exactly what it's not..you used the oldest trick in the book - this masterpiece has to be held up in front of a mirror and read backwards! You and i both know what's it's really about, don't we pal? Why, it's about sharing a balony sandwhich with the one you love Thank you once again Hammer..you take care of yourself and would you please wipe that mustard off your chin Bravo!
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Why thank you Galfalfa, I knew I was cute but you have made my day with calling me a beauty. Oh, where you talking about the background? Well I cant take credit for that cause I picked it up at the background center here at allpoetry.
You are kidding me right? Outdone myself again??? Oh the humanity of it all, and here I was thinking I was doing ok, seeing the outdone group and making real progress. How could this happen? What shall I tell the group? Perhaps I shall go into hiding. Please dont let this get out or I will have to return to step 2 and go through all those seminars once more, I really cant handle that
I guess I should say thank you for the hand even though you have surely set me back at least three years with my group.
No really I do appreciate the comment and appluase and would walk backwards to Kansas for a comment of yours. Take care and try to behave yourself.
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I have meter???? Geez now I shall have to try to become a poet. Bohb how could you do this to me? Laying this worldly responsability upon my frail shoulders???? Alright I shall try my hand at it....lol. You know me always have my head in the clouds looking for those bridge shaped "dragon x-ing" signs....lol. Now all I have to do is write the book and I should have a complete novel.....hmmmm! Dont hold your breath on that though. I do appreciate you stopping in and reading through this write, and the appluase was a nice way to slide me a few points as well. I hope all is going well with you and I can get a few moments to swing by your shop and see the latest and greatest. Thank you once again and take care of yourself.
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Thank you Queen, I do appreciate the kind words and the applause. Perhaps the other way around, it is I that is distant from everyone else....lol. No just kidding I really didnt have anyone in mind, just something that leaked out while I was napping in my chair and I awoke to find it spelled out in drool.....
.....lol. Once again kidding. Thank you for reading this and commenting I do really appreciate it and thats no kidding. Take care.
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Well this sure is a beauty HammeR - you've outdone yourself yet again Bravo on this one .
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Ah.....worthy of the grand visions this illuminates -- your meter is superb!
This could be the urging of an author for the ill-read to sample the wares of books....to be transported at a whim to places under dual suns and strange peoples.
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Well i have missed you, but this poem was worth the wait. Sounds like someone is distant from you, and you are wishing they would find their way back.
I wish only the best for you
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