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Poetry Poop

 

(This has been edited several times, so it should be more entertaining...
so if you comment score it on a scale of blahs- 1-100)



Anger.
It’s alive!
Should I scream?
How about kill?
Shout?
Let it out.
Break free.
Blah blah blah…
I’m not really angry.



 

I’m sorry.
I won’t pretend
I didn’t cause you pain.
Why did you run away?
I just want to say "I’m sorry"
and make it all go away
and blah blah blah
this didn’t happen either.



 

I’m in your prison.
I’m your destiny.
I’m held captive
by your love.
A lethal injection
of your rejection
makes me bleed
and die
and blah blah blah.

 



Your body is dying.
You keep on flying.
You drop like a feather.
Your soul is mine forever.
You are stuck with a knife.
Lots of gore
and blah blah blah.
Poetry Poop.



 

Our love was complete.
How could you possible go?
We were happy in our life.
You did not see.
You pushed me aside.
You’ve broken my dreams
and blah blah blah
If I write any more of this
I really am going to scream...

I want you moreAhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!



 



There is one thing that's obvious-
I'm in a blah mood.
I'm just not connecting with what I'm writing.

Sorry there are no hidden meanings
and blah blah blah...

 



OK, I will attempt some TRUE poetry now:


My cardinal flower
emits a poisonous gas
that travels in a glass bottle
through a difficult and dangerous country.
While it decays
I give serious attention
to its four main features
of classification-
confusion, officiousness, reference, and luck.
Then I call it back
to dissect it
and hang it from the ceiling
to study its character.
Then I form a committee
to judge its effectiveness.
Then I yawn.
Go ahead, yawn with me.
Yawn!
Drivel!

A rewrite is required.
Done.
Go read "My Cardinal Flower".
Much better... not perfect yet,
but wait until it gets 100 edits.

Don't forget to come back...

 



Maybe some randomness will work here:

Hey, you!
See these words-
They can scratch your back!
By the way, have you seen your back lately?
It is layered with puppets.
Lavish French puppets
That say ‘oui’,
Or ‘répondre par l'affirmative’.
or blah blah blah.
French poop.



I just literarily just died there literarily.
But I did offer meaningless meaningful hidden meanings-
don’t bother to bother to figure it out.
In fact it doesn’t matter as a matter of fact.
Or does it? Will it? Won't it? Want it?
Yuck. Overdoing the trite play on words now.
Ug Fuf Mooeee Boop
Alnost too tired to type blah now.
Fingers crawling across the keyboard.
Bl...
...ahhhh.


Now that's the kind of stuff
That belongs in the wastebasket of life
Until real writing begins.
Hey, who's sifting through my wastebasket?



"Au revoir!"
Pronounced 'ove wah'-
means 'goodbye' in French.

There!
This poem WAS worth something-
if you didn't know how to spell 'au revoir'.

Now I can smile sideways.      oops, well, I tried.

Author notes

Blah blah blah. Sometimes we get this way.
This has been edited several times since the last comments,
so I'm featuring it again for more fun.
Written February 4th, 2005

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  • wbiro gold member
    December 19, 2005
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    thanks, nowhere... yes, the blah blah blah feel! Gets all of us sooner or later!


  • Suburban THRILLS
    December 19, 2005
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    nice...it is how i feel at my worst, when i have no inspiration..."blah, blah, blah..." isnt that the truth? mostly every lyric or poem seems that way these days...your poem? doesnt need any more editing...its done its job. great work.


  • metrophobiac
    December 4, 2005
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    Say it like it is! Rambles, rambles, love it....and yes the satirical twist.....nice...blah blah blah bekah

  • K-Dense
    May 18, 2005
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    The opinions expressed in this piece are all too true. As a Slam (IE "performance") poet, I not only can relate wholeheartedly to the characters whose work you discuss, but am reminded greatly of a poem by Edward Thomas Herrera called "My Pain Keeps Me Regular." What's more, I myself have tackled the theme of poetic cliches, and poets who substitute whining for depth a few times in my own work, be it in comical (my poem "Tribute To Spoken Word," which coincidentally shares your "blah, blah, blah" hook) serious ("Political Yaktivist")or some mixture of both ("Slam Widows.") In any case, I'm not only going to say "Good job," in resposne to you writing this, so much as "Thank you," because I'm very glad to know that someone out there shares my views on people who think they're deep writers because they blab about their habits of cuttign that for all we know, they may or may not actually participate in.-Curtis Meyer

    PS Please feel free to read the poems I've mentioned above, as well as any/all poetry posted on this site by k-dense (myself)


  • CountryCousin
    May 18, 2005
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    Covered it well

    Well you certainly covered the whole realm of poetry. I must say you covered it well and not in poop. I have to read that other one when I get the chance.


  • Sensual Sapphire
    May 18, 2005
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    Parts of this made me scratch my head and ask myself if I understood it or is it truly meant as drivel? Life is full of poop like this. Some blah some interesting and some that if you disect you find a kernel of wisdom and truth. (aka a peanut)
    For random poopieness this take the urinal cake.

    April


  • blind2u
    May 18, 2005
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    i didnt get this poem at all but hey you all like it, but it aint my type of thing but then again you probably dont like my poems as you think its just a copy of some other rubbish someone else has written but it aint really its just stuff that comes from my heart and when i feel it i write it. but oh well whatever floats your boat may sink mine


  • Sayyadina
    May 18, 2005
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    LOL! this is such a melting pot of so many different things. It's almost like a stream of consciousness. I know the 'blah' feeling- u read some stuff that sounds 'blah' and doesn't go beneath the surface- u manage to do two things: stay on the surface and go deeper- this is great


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    May 18, 2005
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    You took me into the mind of a true poet. All the blather and self-talk that goes through the writing process. this was great. It showed it all and I recognized my self-talker has the same blahs now and again.

    "you rejection"..methinks you meant "your", correct?

  • Saraswati
    May 18, 2005
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    blah blah blah?


  • beeblebear
    May 18, 2005
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    pissed myself

    First thing to make me laugh out loud today. Anyone who gets offended by this properly needs a sense of humour overhaul. I'm as guilty of some of this poop (good word, don't think I've ever used it before) as many many others, and now I feel I have a duty to go and delete everything I ever wrote. But I won't, I don't have the will power. My sides hurt. WAHEY!

  • tinkerbellobob
    May 5, 2005
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    fuzztastic!

    I don't get why you called it poop it might have tought someone something over all the poem was... (and I say this in the nicest way) interesting.


  • peluche
    May 5, 2005
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    The more poems I read, the more I feel like this as well. Blah blah. It's all the same topic, all the same words, just the same old drivel written under a different name to protect the innocent. This was an interesting way to express the boring, day after day content of this site.





  • Uticajohnson
    May 5, 2005
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    hahahahahahahaha

  • Miyako777
    May 5, 2005
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    hey why is my smily face not laughing?

  • Miyako777
    May 5, 2005
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    Ha,ha,haaaaaaaha, I liked it,nope i loved it, even the whole blah, blah, bla


  • wbiro gold member
    February 16, 2005
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    You didn't see the humor- because I entered this one by accident and didn't know how to unenter it! It's more angsty and weird than humorous. Yes.


  • punkrocksmidge
    February 16, 2005
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    This is weird. Maybe I'm just stupid (doubtful), but didn't really see the humor in this. Oh well, it's still a good poem. Nice work, and thanks for entering..
    ~Smidge~

  • Gleto Orica
    February 4, 2005
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    FantabulousPoop!!!

    My friend you remind me of myself, and it's scary...and not because of that...but because you put it better than I ever do...Lol...this has more meaning than a bag of empty grease, to be smeered onto a Loving denim pocket holding a note from the one who'll say fare well...your thought process is admirable...I was grinning, then found myself with a chuckle here and there...until I decided that I Love this too much...it's eggzacitically what they're not looking for...but you've given me eggzaciticitically what I asked for...and then some...it's not about your own form...it's about your own way of expressing yourself...realing us into scattered thought...oh, if I wasn't a certified crazy person; this would drive any sane person to the brinks of everything too possible to imagine, and die because their simple minds need structure too much to feel safe and comfortable...I was thinking many different things when reading through...and I Like that very much...I also like the link in the middle causing more effort on my part to comprehend something...anything...with all the nudges to say there is no meaning...yet...to say there is nothing, is saying something... ...hence, the meaning is all yours...I sensed a variety of different ways of writing poetry...to the point you couldn't satnd it and had to just say, yeah, blah blah blah...and go on to the next way to say...in a way, saying...hey you poetry people...has it all really been done to the point of oh, why bother...blah blah blah...maybe that wasn't intentional...but you still got two glass eyed thumbs way up...thanks for entering again...it was like going through a ride at Universal studios...all janras(I couldn't spell that even if John Raw told me forty times...) popping up infront of my eyes as I wheel through to the next episode of who's thought is it?...take care...good luck...
    God Bless...
    Bugs & Phishes

    ~Glet rica/C. L. Brandon K.~
    you could've just been playing with my head to type all this just to see if I'd critique it well, or seem clueless to anything...well...I wear my humility on my jacket swung over my shoulder to give it to who ever's cold...
    'I'm in a blah mood'...Lol...
    AngelSnot...

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