Only by the stars that sweep the night sky
Have I ever seen your face
The soothing time of twilight alone
Has revealed your grace
The gentle breeze blowing, that lives only
To softly caress your skin
Dies a willing death, to return
And wrap you once again
The teasing breath of evening stirs
Caressing the tendrils of your hair
It weaves around you and darts away
Hesitant to touch one so fair
Your step is as the down from the flowers
Stirred by your body as you pass
You leave no footprint on the ground
Not even on the grass
How is it possible that one such as you
Could love one such as I
The mere thought that you just might
Is enough to make me sigh
There is nothing that can exceed
The beauty you contain
Your existence is an epic song
With a never ending refrain
Surely nothing can surpass the beauty
That is yours by right of birth
The poetry that is in your movements
Is the sum of all on earth
But wait, what is that to the west?
A blinding orb of light
It is great enough to take my breath
It even takes my sight
There is nothing now can match it
It is truly a work of art
But glancing back at you
I am struck straight through my heart
As bright and grand the orb is now
And even more it grows
I realize your beauty rested
Always in shadows
For nothing can convince me
That orb is brighter yet
Than the face I now behold
And never will forget
You are my sun and moon
You outshine every star
You have my love forever
Undying, as we are
I am jealous of the wind and stars
That have touched your body fair
When I have been content thus far
To worship and to care
To caress your beauty with my mouth
My words my only touch
I feel they have served me poorly
They can only say so much
So answer now else I will die
I cannot bear the pain
Of your refusal in my ears
I will ask only once again
You say yes? My love
Is returned a thousand fold?
And to think I might have lost it all
If I had only not been bold
~*~
Author notes
A declaration of love by an Elf, at the creation of the sun.
Option 2
Written March 15th, 2004
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This one is actually quite exceptional. I have an appreciation for meter. It isn't a common skill.
The imagery came across quite well, although I would not have known the voice to be an Elf. Still, the elven atmosphere carries a very strong presence. -
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I thought you might like it. Something I wrote for a fiction I am writing.
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I am glad you like it. If you read the comments box, it is rather ethereal. It is fiction based, as are most of my songs. There is just something magical about Tolkien. Thank you for commenting.
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beautifully done. great job. once agian i have found a poem that is filled with love in every word which is exactly what i'm looking for. thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
kayz
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Excellent
That's putting your heart out there! It's almost eerie to me; it seems as if it's about a ghost or other ethereal spirit, which gives it a haunting, scary-beautiful quality. Excellent work.
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Thank you. It is a fantasy poem, but like most of my lighter stuff, it is based on those who directly influence me; in this case, my SO. Thank you for reading and commenting.
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This is really nice and sweet. If you're talking about an actual person, I think they're ver lucky.
Thanks for entering.
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This is such a change of pace from the other poem that I just read by you. Though this one is not as long. The ending was such a complete feeling, with the idea of your potential loss if you had not been bold and risked everything.
This line is among my favorites... it is just brilliant:
"Caressing the tendrils of your hair"
Thank you for sharing another beautiful poem that vastly demonstrates your talent as a writer and as a poet. Good luck again in the contest.
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it's a beautiful verse ... thnx for creating and posting
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Thank you. If you know the background of it, you will understand how deep the beauty really lies. He is comparing her to the sun, rising for the first time on his world. She even surpasses that. It is a concept that only the deeply in love will grasp. I know that is how I view it. I know by your poems that you can only view it that way, also. Thank you for reading. Your praise means much to me. Maybe more than you will ever know.
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i think this poem has some really outstanding breathless moments, you have a soft kind heart, to speak so beautifully in ryhme is no small feat. I think this is well deserving of many accolades. very well done
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I suppose you would have to know the context of the poem to answer that. Suffice it to say that it is not about humans. Thank you for reading and commenting.
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tragic
i'm not sure if this is far from perfection or oblivion. well written.
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