With mixed emotions rushing by
Preparing to depart
To leave behind these ghostly walls
I leave behind my heart...
The hallway drips with an emptiness
My footsteps echo loud
'Cross memeories of a simple life
Falls a somber shroud
Another glance into the bedroom
Where we once acted love
Those walls saw so much happiness
Though now,nothing left of...
The laughter which once resounded
Twixt whispered forevers
Gentle caresses in the night
And promises to n'er...
Let the other cross o'er the Earth
Alone....
To face life's trials
But promises made during times
O'joy, are just denial
Of the pain a broken heart brings
Preparing to depart...
The empty halls of ghostly lore
To face another start~
(((( pic is courtesy of www.elfwood fantasy.com))))
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Written September 19th, 2002
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the imagery is grand and this flowed so well
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excellent
Well done! Great imagery...haunted memories in the ghostly walls...very sad...excellent poem!
:-) Maureen -
excellent
pic don't fit your words or i just see them differently, the artist/poets veiw only last until the pen is lifted the final time, then the interpertation is in the eye of the beholder the say, thus it is in the minds of your readers that your poem takes on it's true value, lol i liked this write, and yes i just love to bable and leave people to guess at my meaning,
words weighted
like a stone
they shone with light
which exeists no more
color beauty lost in my fate,
gray last forever
as darkness comes
will you run or stand firm
the darkness will shake you
will you trip will you fall?
don't ask pooped into my head as i was writting my coment, i hope it doesn't offened you i posted it here, lol i love your poems lol---cell48 -
excellent
I like this. Melancholy, but well penned. -
don't touch it!
hey hunn.....such images you give...so beautiful....
Adriana Rosas -
don't touch it!
Sad and lonely place...life that is... nice write my Sis...well penned...~~~GILL~~~ -
excellent
This felt wistful and distant. Very sad, but I enjoyed reading it. -
don't touch it!
A fantastic write you have here Susan ... I can feel all the different elements of a haunted place and feel those elements being utilized to depict a relationship that has developed into the same ..... great use of language and picture to really strike home this sad sad depiction of a relationship that has turned -
don't touch it!
Oooo. I love this. very haunting and sad.
*loves* -
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oh man this was a great write!!!! -
Thank you Nam
Susan~~~ -
excellent
great pic. great write.
:0)
Nam -
Thank you so much Windsong
Appreciate it
Susan~~~ -
don't touch it!
it is sad, but i also see hope! as always, very well written! -
why Thank You
Mistress Bear!!!!!
Susan~~~ -
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This is excellent work Susan, very well done!! ENJOYED!!! :)
~Best Wishes~
M.B -
Thank you Torn hun:)
Susan~~~ -
don't touch it!
Yay! I'm first!
I normally don't dig rhymed poetry, but this is PERFECT!!!
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