Just when the emptiness had won control over me,
You come in my life and give me hope that had died
… Long ago;
Rekindled the flame once I thought inflammable,
The warmth it gave me when you carried me
… When I was weak;
Held my hand when darkness tried to surround me,
Strengthen my mended heart and held me close
… Made me feel secure;
Secure as a bird protected in the heavens of lands
Distant into the earth’s fathomless imagination
… Lost by hope;
You have conjured everything into your hands
Now that we have each other, dear I hope
… You are here to stay.
Author notes
Um... please no harsh comments... I know it doesn't make sense at all... but for crying out loud I am writing after a month or so... Please be nice and I'll give you a cookie.
Written February 3rd, 2005
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aw i thought this was a very sweet poem
i love poems about someone in love
its a beautiful write ! thank you for sharing with the rest of us!
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that was amazing. Awsome write. Beautiful write for not writing anything after a month. Hope to see some more pieces from you.
jason -
Its lovely. Makes well enough sense to be, but sometimes poetry is better when you set it free. Honestly, as long as what you write holds special meaning in your heart, it doesn't matter whether anyone else gets it or not. Chances are it'll mean something entirely different to them anyway. That's the case with this poem. It remindes me of something, and though I'm not sure whether or not its what you intended in writing it, I'm totally floored by the outcome. Awesome.
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This makes sense -
It it a tender write and is very eloquent -
I have not read your writes lately - this shows how you have improved
and I hope he is a good guy - to be involved with one with your gentle soul - -
Beauty withing words and emotions I share. Not ever can I express how much love you have given me with such an eloquent hand. Whomever is your inspiration has given you an abiltiy to weave your all within words that reach to one and all.
rose
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I don't know why any would give harsh comments. I found this quite and interesting peice. A great job. Now wheres my cookie..... I am only joking
. your freind-Yawgmoth
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Hey there long time no talk. I just read this beautiful write. and congrats to neptune386 for their comment... he/she sums it all up. It really does'nt matter what other people think about your writing as long as it makes sense to you and you think its beautiful, i mean come on now read some of my writing...its not all that great but in my mind i think its perfect and thats all that matters. so thank you for sharing this great piece. And my your god be with you.
~Laurie -
I am happy to read this write and hope the Gods and Goddesses are still smiling down on you -
Where is my cookie? -
hope .. love
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Outstanding imagery in this piece that shows gratitude to another. (If I'm reading it correctly, that is...my son is playing his piano thing with just this annoying rapid beat that sounds like a mosquito right now and I cannot think...lol
) Anyhow, just stopped by to read at least one of your beautiful pieces, comment, say "HI" and gotta say your new homepage looks wonderful. But then, you always have such wonderful backgrounds to match your pieces. Many hugs to you dear and hope you are doing better now. rose
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I think this it beautiful. The words, the form, the colours. It all feels perfect. The tone is so..dark and sad. But It has a charm that draws the reader in so well, not forcefully, but some kind of force beyond the poem itself. Almost stellar. I Love this, Thank you for sharing!
Treble -
Good lord! Read your comment after the outstanding read of this piece...It has but one thing that would make it perfect missing. I believe you should add ed at the end of "Strengthen". It would flow perfectly then, I believe. Wonderfully expressive and passionate write!!! Mine lately have been...kinda sucko. rose
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This is really beautiful Sis, Where have you been! We share the same awesome cyber dad and being sisters and all we have chatted in awhile, its nice to read a write from you tho
Sorry that I have been so distant with you. I love this write, and it sure makes sense to me. This is deeply beautiful and I love the background... may I borrow a background or two, let me know if its not and I'll understand. Great Job Sis, keep in touch 
---Sara
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reminds me of my love...
;-; that's so beautiful it brought tears to my eyes (of course part of that may be due to the current situation...but its still a lovely poem)not that you care but it reminds me of stephen ;-; anyways i'll shut up about him...
and i love your background its so pretty! Those little flowers look similar to something that grows around my yard o.o;
^-^ i'm looking forward to reading more of your poems--excellent write! -
wonderful
This is very beautiful. I remember these days and hoped they would last. But karma has a way of balancing out.
An excellent poem and love these little flowers.
thanks,
Talia -
Aw, I hope you show Ty this!! He'll love it and if he don't tell him Matt's coming for him
This was a lovely break-out piece truly you haven't lost your talent and I don't think you ever will no matter how long your "breaks" are. Amazing, simply amazing
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Sweet and gentle - a sense of beautiful rejuvination - now where is my cookie?
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This is very sweet. When you write about love or emotions, or anything that makes you feel intensly...sometimes it only makes sense to you and that's all that matters. So good and so full of emotion. Well done.
Alyssa
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