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Once Upon a Wicked Weekend- an Absurd Bird

 

 Once upon a wicked weekend, while I stumbled, lost and bleary
 I came upon a brassy bird whose only utterance was, “Absurd”.
  There he perched upon my bust, wings stirring up my chamber dust 
  and as I grabbed a broom and pan he croaked that pointless word again

          that fair and radiant raven whom the demons must have named 'Absurd'  
  sitting there, dropping turds.


 

 In my drunken state of sorrow, I pondered if he had too many drinks, too;

and I asked him, "Oh, foul feathered creature, why the only utterance of 'Absurd'?” 
   His two red eyes, gleaming embers, scarcely aware of what they remember 
   this horrid spectre at my door who flew in from the Nevermore 
          croaked its only birdbrained stock and store

   and then an echo murmured back, “Absurd.”
I looked around, nothing there...


 

Staring simultaneously at two walls, how I longed to hear it call
instead it spoke that only word, as if from hell, it shrieks, “Absurd!" 
  I asked it of my lost love Rose, and peering close, it pecked my nose; 
  I swung my bottle, it was so unfair, so not to hear that damned “Absurd”  
          but the dirges of my hope, since I’m a melancholy dope, 
  and a drunkard with bad aim, only heared the word  “Absurd” again.


 

 Right then and there my fight was lost, I cursed the Fates our paths hath crossed  
 I never dreamed demise-conferred would be a peculiar, absurd bird. 
   So now I’m nodding, it’s a-flapping; I'm now a-snoring, it’s still a-flapping  
   and it frightens away the salesman who came a-knocking at my door- 
           this grim, ungainly, gaunt and ghastly, schizophrenic, croaking, mangy  
           flapping, screechy, pecking, bug-eyed, lowly catatonic bird
    who screaming stock and store is that only utterance, one "Absurd".


Hmmm... maybe the little guy will earn his keep, after all... 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

this is a variation of retribution's (now PonderingPoetess) "Absurd Bird" with permission, of course! I guess that makes this a 'collaboration' of sorts...
Written February 3rd, 2005

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  • Random Goldfish gold member
    October 18, 2007

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    Haha! I love it. ^_^

    "So now I’m nodding, it’s a flapping; I'm now a-snoring, it’s still a-flapping
    and it scares away the salesman who came knocking at my door-"


    • wbiro gold member
      October 18, 2007
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      thanks, I'm still 'fixing' it as you read, it's a tough one...!

  • lovePoe
    October 16, 2007
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    Great

    Clever and funny. When I think of Poe I just don't often thinking of chuckling being possible.

    • wbiro gold member
      October 18, 2007
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      and thanks again, there were still many micro-improvements to be done...!


    • wbiro gold member
      October 18, 2007
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      glad you still enjoyed this Poe pastiche (I see you commented over two years ago!)


  • antique
    August 4, 2005
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  • Ceilinh
    August 2, 2005
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    LOL! that's hilarious- a parody on Poe- not quite as depressing as the original- too funny!

    -Ceilinh


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    August 2, 2005
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    this was a great guffaw at the ending. Well done...

  • Zivlok
    August 2, 2005
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    Absurd!

    Very funny! i like it. I loved the second stanza. The first couple stanzas were a little rythmically off, but it got much better and is still a great poem.

  • momentarylapse
    May 29, 2005
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    absurd!hahaha.funny bird.mine hanged himself after reading a poem of mine.was torn between saying absurd and nevermore,i guess.oh well.hello.no applause left.um,maybe tomorrow.hehe.
    good evening master wbiro.


  • Death by Murder
    May 24, 2005
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    That's so funny!!! I love it!!!


  • Frogzter gold member
    April 23, 2005
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    Oh this is too funny! I love it! You really did this justice! Thanks... I really needed the laugh! It was great!


  • StoryOfaLostLove
    April 16, 2005
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    im still laughing

    LMAO i found that really funny...i love it 110%!!!!!hilarious....um, and to let you know, that was a beautiful rendition of my bird...do you mind ever so much returning him?

    yours in life as in death.
    mandie


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    March 31, 2005
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    I looked upon this poem bleek
    and found the humor i did seek
    thank's this was very poeficiently done
    you are a very prolific writer it took awhile to find this


  • Rhynoceros
    March 30, 2005
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    haha funny......


  • lila
    March 29, 2005
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    awesome write!!!!


  • March 27, 2005
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    hmm.. perhaps a little too similar to 'poe'. but I like the drunken touch


  • B Chandler
    March 27, 2005
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    hun u outdo yourself everytime...i envy u and ill make this one of my fav and bookmark it

  • lovePoe
    March 27, 2005
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    Definitely applauding this one! I think I've seen that bird a time or two, nasty little bugger that one..someone always invites along a buzzkill

    Great write, very funny but witty enough to hang with the original.

  • wbiro gold member
    March 18, 2005
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    Thanks for the comment- it made me go back and improve a thing or two!

  • pozo
    March 18, 2005
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    Amazing poem which I liked a lot, this was a great poem and parody of the Raven It is a good poem and inspired by a great one too
    Keep writing, this was an amazing poem
    All the best,
    Pozo

  • wbiro gold member
    February 15, 2005
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    that's 20,000 Hertz. Or 'hurts' in this case?


  • B2oH
    February 4, 2005
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    Ach! You've twisted Poe until he screams in agony......and he's up to about 20,000 RPM.

    No....this is really quite clever. I've read many a forgotten pastiche on "The Raven" and this ranks as one of the best.

    Clever.


  • Touchof1der silver member
    February 3, 2005
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    This is such a jewel. I have no idea what the original read like but I do like what you have done here. Your talent far exceeds the ordinary dribble and tidbits that are often dropped here and there. I do enjoy reading you. You never fail to please my literary palette and fill my mind with thoughts and images that I might not otherwise entertain. Good luck in the contest!
    ♥ Kimberly


  • PonderingPoetess
    February 3, 2005
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    Ahhhhhhhhh, perfection achieved. An excellent extention, I suppose this is a collaboration by the living and the non. Hehehe You did a great job with the additions. I like your ending much better as well.

  • wbiro gold member
    February 3, 2005
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    Yes, next time you're out drunk and bleary, you can think of that bird!


  • Kindredblood
    February 3, 2005
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    Hilarious

    Lol cool flow and rythme and you can keep the bird lol, dont think I could handle it saying absurd all the time, lol it would end up in the oven, though my guess is it would be tough and stringy and give me absurd nightmares or food poisening
    Excellent write and a way cool poem.
    Another one to my book marks.

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