1 cup darkness
2 cups light
˝ cup opinion
And he’ll be just right
1 perfect smile
A pinch of bad
A bundle of happy
And not too much sad
1 gallon of hotness
A dab of flaws
A whole lot of reason
A pint of cause
Give me some laughter
And make it loud
Lots of humor
But not too proud
3 oz of cuddle
1 tsp of space
4 lbs of manliness
2 qt of grace
Mix it all together
Bake it long
I want him handsome
I want him strong
Take him out
And top him with trust
Coat on some passion
And love is a must
After that
Hand him over to me
You’ve read the recipe to my heart
And made my husband to be
Author notes
Written September 26th, 2004
A contest entry
- An Ideal Husband by Frodofan.
380 points, ended September 10, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Wow!
Quiet a recipe you have here, Gal! Congratulations on the Silver ...
Love
Myra
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The ending could be a little smoother. That second to last line sort of throws off the beat you'd set in the preceding lines. Best recipe poem I've come across I think. I like the combinations!
Thanks for entering.
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it is rrr-rreally so sweet....nice penning haan!
~good luck for the contest! (:
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This is EXCELLENT! It flowed like black molassas, sugary sweet. Oh, I truly loved your recipe. This is what poetry is all about. Your oven-baked notions of love are purely rhythmic, and leave me salivating for more. Very original and creative! The coating is just right. My favorite lines;
"Give me some laughter
And make it loud
Lots of humor
But not too proud"
I simply loved this. It made me smile!
Renee
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