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Tell me

The first time our lips touched.
i knew that it was true.

You are the one i wanna be with.
No-one else can make me feel this way.

You help me deal with all my troubles.
you make them all disappear.

So now my dear,
tell me you feel the same.

Tell me you just wanna be with me.
Because the feelings i have are true.

You're the only one that i wanna
call my boo.

We met in the strangest way,
but that's always how true love goes.

You make me feel all tingly inside.
I love you,that's all there is to it.

So tell me you feel the same.

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Written February 3rd, 2005

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  • CryingPrincess
    February 2, 2006
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    Great as ussual! Wow, it seems like forever since I've written a poem or talked to you. Well, i'm glad you havent picked up on my bad habbits. I can just really feel you on this poem. I feel the same way about my b/f. Great write!! hope to hear from ya soon! keep up the kick ass writing
    ~Rachel~

  • Shinsetsu
    February 4, 2005
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    Awsome!!! first comment!!! I really really like this poem!!! your a good poet. You really are!!! Keep it all up!!! You might be famous one day!!!! *First comment dance* yeah... kinda stupid.... but i'm used to it on elfwood. (i have an account there. you should check it out [it's on my poetry page, so you can just click on it]) KEEP IT UP AGAIN!!!!