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Nightmare in Pink

 

Come, take my life

With your evil heart

I have lost my voice

In your winter of pink

My twisted body in the echoing ice

Suffocates in the black darkness

Of your nightmare in pink.

 

My spirit escapes

The blade of lust

To writhe on the floor

Under your feet

The green turns to gray

The walls crash down

And bury me

In you nightmare in pink.

 

Inside I died

Longing for you

My world fell apart

In swirling confusion

Why didn’t it hurt?

Because I had never been

But a savage crimson stain

On your nightmare in pink.

 

One last time

I reach for you

I bleed, I die

So small my grasp

I can’t go back

To my happy mask.

 Under dead trees

I sit on a bench

With an empty seat

While the sun shuns

Your nightmare in pink.

 

I stumble in the rain

With bleeding eyes

I knew I was dead

I just didn’t want to admit it

I saw you on the horizon

Standing silently

Waiting to hurl me back into

Your nightmares in pink.

 

 

Author notes

I needed a poem to go with my modified background...
by the way the skull is really a Predator or Orc skull looking down to the LEFT... not a human skull looking down to the RIGHT... or is it both?
Written February 3rd, 2005

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  • Despairkitty
    February 5, 2005
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    I agree with Darkness. This was a great job. I loved it. It flowed so well, and you did a great job bringing this background to life.
    Despair


  • wbiro gold member
    February 3, 2005
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    thanks for the props!


  • My Darkness
    February 3, 2005
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    Actually this is one of the better ones entered in my contest, i'm kind of surprised that this is just based on the background...i could never come up with something like this based on a background, props on that...Anyway, as for your words and flow, they were perfect ...You remind me of myself, which is great, because that's what i'm looking for..Thanks for entering and good luck to you

    take care

    -Darkness-


  • PonderingPoetess
    February 3, 2005
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    An excellent blending of the dark mystical words, and the awesome background!! I found my eyes wandering to the pink skull after every verse of "Your nightmare in pink" and a cold chill down my spine accompanied each glance. A thrilling ride through the macabre.


  • Kindredblood
    February 3, 2005
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    Deep and vivid write, filled with a sad intensity and weaved in shadows of powerful emotions, excellent poem, enjoyed reading it.

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