Bottle full of greens and blues
Knockin at the door for you
Here's my heart to see it all
Nothing there to catch my fall
You left a note for me to read
I fucked this up, now let me bleed
Let me bleed
Let me bleed
Bleed to grieve
Grieve to dream
Can you hear me...
I know Bad men do what good men dream
Let this be low self-esteem
Down the hole I can't escape
From the mind that they create
While I...
Drip, trip, slip into the stream
Back into our medicated dreams
I'm so tired of layin here
Alone re-playin all my fears
You told me one day I'd give in
To walk on these souls worn too thin
The cut you gave me on my eye
Is stingin now while I cry
While I cry
While I cry
Cry to try
Try to die
Can u see me...
I know Bad men do what good men dream
Let this be low self-esteem
Down the hole that they create
From these dreams there's no escape
So I'll...
Drip, trip, slip into the stream
Back to sleep in medicated dreams
I can feel it comin now
The end of stumblin all around
I grab the sheet up by my head
You got your wish, and now Im dead
I can see you stare at me
Your crying now as I bleed
As I bleed
As I bleed
Bleed you grieve
Grieve you dream
Can u feel me...
I know Bad men do what good men dream
This must be low self-esteem
In the hole that they create
From the dreams no one escapes
Now I'll...
Drip, Trip, slip into the stream
Back to swim in medicated dreams
I can't swim
I can't swim
Even if I want to...
Author notes
Written February 3rd, 2005
A contest entry
- What does it mean to be ALONE? by WhenWillsCollide.
575 points, ended May 30, 2007, 60 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Fabulous
this is an amazing poem well done great write. It flows reallly welland i love the repition 'let me bleed...'.
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amazing
this is quality. and so sad. I love the lines "i know Bad men do... low-self-esteem".
well done
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Pretty good.
I really enjoyed reading this- it is a truly awesome write. You should let it shine more by correcting the spelling... unless the spelling is supposed to mean something and I'm being a blind ass. :-P
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Thanks
Hey man you're really not being blind, and it's sad that you are the first person that caught that actually. The mispelling is actually intentional though. Yeah I was thinking about that song "Knockin on heavens Door" and thought that Knockin just gave it a better feel. I think poetry should look good and sound good. It just gave it a more real feeling is what I'm trying to say man, I ramble a bit sometime. Honestly though thanks for the critique.
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OMG. that was pheonominal. this was so good, that I dnt feel the need to comment because I know that everyhting I say will shun this poem/song... I am so speechless.. I think I have found the winner and this is the 5th poem I have read
just, just, jsut...FANTATIC
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wow this is a brilliant piece, thanks for entering and good luck! rach xx
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good poem
WOW THIS IS A PRETTY POWERFUL AND DARK PIECE OF POETRY , BUT WELL WRITTEN, KEEP ON WRITING.
Edited on Feb 03, 8:33 because 'mis spelt word'. -
Love it
I love it!I
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