if we said
‘ i love you ‘
everyday
since that phrase was relevant
we would have proclaimed this
two-thousand
five-hundred
fifty-five times
(five-thousand, one-hundred-ten times between us)
but
i think we’ve said it more.
my heart aches
more than any stubbed toe
skinned knee
not-so-serious kitchen burn
[and]
‘ i miss you ‘
as true today as when we walked
(separate directions)
parting tearfully
at the local airport –
i refused to look back.
now three-thousand miles apart
connected by
colorful envelopes
familiar hand-writing
[and]
speedy technology.
but still lacking
that intimate feel
(icravesomuch)
existing [accessibly] now
in our shared recollections
[and]
courier new.
font-size ten.
Author notes
<3
Written February 1st, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Love Poetry - Apple Hearts and Almond Fingertips by sleepysmile3.
500 points, ended February 9, 2005, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your 100th poem by Loveandblessings2u.
975 points, ended March 16, 2008, 33 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i love this,
your words are so touching,
your writing style is awesome.
very nice job, you done.
good luck in the contest.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
joyce
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I love the format you have used here... it adds such a powerful feel to your words... and such a wistful feel overall... I really like the way you used the calculations - that was my favorite part
wonderful poem
Keep writing
Polly
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well...
I read this three times over, - purely because I found the layout very different and I wanted to make sure I read everything correctly.
I really liked this for many reasons.
Its a romantic piece, and I quite liked the layout once I got used to it - it made it feel more like a unique speech given to the person it was written for.
I really liked this, well done xxx -
this is a wonderful poem i liked it very much good luck in the contest
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AHHH. That ending, was awesome. Ooooh my god. <3
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Great Write
WOW such beautifully written I like it,I give this Two Thumbs Up on this fine piece. I so hope to read more of your amazing writes,and thank you for sharing this with my family and I. Keep up the wonderful job you do. -
I love this piece.The yearning is palpable, the counting tangible evidence of long distance connection.The rich tapestry of image, the airport scene, the skinned knee, for some reason, reminds me of good independant film.Your fractured lines and arrangement of phrasing guides the reader to the correct flow and pleases the eye.Never stop.Rob
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I can only offer applause- to begin to comment on how much it got under my skin would detract from a feeling of having read something very special which I want to hang on to for a bit.
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This was beautifully said. Your longing heart is there written between the lines and on the lines and in the lines. Data streams between you & your someone tacked up on the AP wall where anyone can see. I, for one, am enjoying these glimpses into your story...
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YES!!!
Ackkkkkkk This is the best poem I have read today!
I love it all, exactly and perfectly. Have you put anything in my contest yet? I IMPLORE you to submit this piece because I adore it so much!
Ok so this was not a very helpful comment, but I truly loved it all.
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AWWWWWWWWWW!! lol. wow, i liked that a lot. Awesome job and great work!! Good luck!
-CoLe
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AMAZING POEM
I really love this. I love these forms you use. One of these days I will have to try one. They look like alot of fun and imagination. Thank you for sharing this terrific poem. Take care, Sandy
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