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loneliness

by myself,
depressed and gray.
i'm basking and sulking
in the harsh reality
that is my loneliness.

i look around.
trying to find someone.
i'm in search of
a glimmer, a gleam,
a slight glimpse of hope.

my heart aches
for affection,
and i am yearning
for love.

Author notes

lol...i don't really know where this came from. i'm not really as lonely as this sounds. i just kinda wrote stuff down. i figured i should write a poem and so ya know...but don't worry. i'm not this depressed
Written February 1st, 2005

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  • hauntedsoul
    February 27, 2005
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    brae!! ok this was awesome! i mean Awesome. I dont know if you just posted this but sry i didnt see it sooner. And i hope you arent that lonely, cuz you know you always got me! even tho its not as good as a guy. lol. well i am just rambling on now. But this was a wonderful poem. you are so gifted, and i am dead serious. luv ya!!

    **macey


  • normal like you
    February 21, 2005
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    this was really good...great job. i know how you feel on this one and i like your wording in this poem. keep up the good work and keep writing great poems like this one.

    ~marcia

  • seethingemotion
    February 17, 2005
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    braeden this is awesome. it completely speaks to me in what is going on in my life. my absolute favorite part:
    i look around.
    trying to find someone.
    in search of
    a glimmer, a gleam,
    a slight glimpse of hope.

    that's absolutely beautiful. great job! --kylee


  • February 1, 2005
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    Thats AWESOME. I know how it feels.. Hope things get better hun
    <3 C


  • mee219
    February 1, 2005
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    Well even if your not that depressed, I know how it feels, and it sucks. I love this part:
    my heart aches
    for affection,
    and i am yearning
    for love.
    It is great writing, and it truly fits with the feelings of depression, and lonlyness, really well. Great write, it is wonderful, and echos some of the thoughts that I have had in the past, and sometimes still have. It really speaks to me.



    Jeff

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