she told me she loved me
and i told her to let go
she wondered why they'd say these things
i swore i didn't know
she talked about the flowers
and how they were not even dead
then she told me she believed me
in spite of everything they'd said
i told her it wasn't good enough
she'd doubted me, i had to leave
i told her many pretty lies
none designed to decieve
i know she saw right through them,
though she pretended ot to care
and i know she's dying inside
because i refuse to be there
Author notes
these are the things i imagine my ex lover would say had he the words- i have to tell myself that
Written February 1st, 2005
A contest entry
- Any kind of Love by dontunderstand.
300 points, ended February 13, 2005, 28 entries
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wow. beautiful. don't you hate the way you have to comfort yourself by hoping this is what the assholes WOULD say if they only stopped to think about someone other than themselves for three seconds... geez. this poem pissed me off. no, not at you. but at guys in general. they're all such freaken jerks. i thought i just had bad luck... but reading your stuff, clearly we suffer the same misfortune... but i realize the truth -- they're all good for nothing. great work. absolutely great. i loved it. and my all those jerks get what's coming to them.
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i love that you enjoy my poetry- that makes me smile... also cool that i remind you of your best friend- this also makes me smile... thank you for your lovely comments
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This poem reminds me of my best firend. Creepy though most of your poems remind me of her. Even so this is a beautiful poem full of disapoint from yourself. Awesome write.
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Sometimes what we dream up for why they do things, turns out to be the truth. I went through a year and a half of hopeful dreaming just find out, I was right. So it is good to dream.
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thank you- i think a lot of people have felt this way- perhaps not the mirror of the situation, but similarities- when ihave more time, i will be sure to read yur work. thanks again
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thank you so much- yeah, i don't really like that line either- when i have more time i'll change it- and i will read your work. again, thanks for reading
blessed be -
I really liked this poem a lot! It flowed well (except one line, "i told her it wasn't good enough
she'd doubted me, i had to leave"
which in my reading didnt really read well). Most of all though, it just touched my heart.
(I did find a typo.... " ot to care" it's suppose to be NOT right?)
Anyway, great job and keep writing!
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this is really amazing...i really loved it, it's so sad...i felt this way so many times, i can imagine my ex telling me the same things that you said...and i can hear myself saying what the woman in this poem is saying. it's very sad...touching, heartfelt. you have a lot of empathy...
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