the flowers aren't even dead
though all the sentiment has died
how can i have them blooming still
when you have gone to her side?
i want to shove them all at you
force them down your throat
a thorn for every tear i've cried
and each tragic line i've wrote
they sit so lovely on the dresser
and laugh at all my pain
i walk into my room- and each time
grow a little more insane.
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please comment- i return the favor, plus then i get to read your words
blessed be
Written February 1st, 2005
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"a thorn for every tear i've cried
and each tragic line i've wrote"
Wouldn't we all like some credit for the pain we've gone through? Simply beautiful. It was really well written. A lot you can say with roses.
~Silver
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a thorn for every tear i've cried <-- that line was extremely well written. i loved it. WOW.
this is yet another brilliant piece... i think you're going under favorites.
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This is a beautiful but heart-wrenching piece. If I were you, I'd throw those flowers away...
Just kidding, but seriously, I could definitely relate to this, as I'm sure many others can as well. I really liked the image of the flowers laughing at someone's pain and shoving them down his throat seems like a wonderfully perfect thing to do. 
You convey such heartbreak here and yet, as KTG pointed it, you also imply the sense of that rebirth that can only happen once we've passed through the fire. Keep up the great work! God bless and be well, Sim. 
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So desperate and gloomy in all it beautiful darkness. I really like this one because it reminds me of death and rebirth. Even though the rebirth is not shown in this piece, I feel that it is implied. Like after one goes insane they reach a breakthrough and come out beautifully alive.
Much Respect and Blessed be,
-KTG (aka- purplethorn) -
what doesnt kill you does NOT make you stronger... it makes you colder. i love that a lot, and i am going to use it in my page if that's all right with you. thank you for reading this- i'm glad you enjoyed it- i'm off to read your pieces now.
blessed be -
thank you for your lovely comment- i'm glad you enjoyed it- i like this poem too, i guess, but i have others i like more- i'm glad you read it. i will be floating off to your page now to hear your words- bye
blessed be -
Wow. That was absolutely amazing. I loved that first line. That was a wonderful first line. It made a great entrance for the rest of the poem, which was so emotional. Wow. Great poem. Write on. ~~SpydurPoet~~
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once again, truly a great write...i loved it...it flowed so nicely..and i especially love the lines
a thorn for every tear i've cried
and each tragic line i've wrote
beautiful...i also liked the last 3 or 4 lines...you are such an amazing writer..but, i think you know that already, since i have told you that on every other comment ive left...but i cant help myself...once again, great write....toodles -
thank you, very much- i love to hear that others enjoy my work- i write for myself, but this makes it all the more worthwhile.
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I hope I have another aplaud to give today, if not I will have to check you out again tomorrow to applaud this one! I felt this one, pretty deep as I am sure you know. Very powerful, and amazingly written. I loved this one!
Gary -
You seem to be new here so first off i'll just say welcome. It makes me so sad to read your poems. I can imagine how you feel... i can't say I know but I can imagine. So much hurt and pain and anger. You have every right to feel those things. Keep writing, Purge your demons on paper. I always wonder what I will do with the poems I've written for the one i love if we break up....poems are a painful reminder of how much devotion and emotion we put into relationships.
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thank you for your time to read my words- i like that a lot. when i have more time i will read more of yours. thank you
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I really like this poem. I loved how you are able to relate the flowers to you, poems with hate and agression are awsum. -TV
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