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only so much

i can only cry so many times
then it surely has to stop
maybe i'll still hate you-
but never worry, my dear
i swear i won't hate you
any more than me
because i never do-
the one thing you never
really understand about me
is how deep the vein
of masochism runs:
through my arms, my legs, my wrists.
does it all make you feel guilty, darling?
do you feel sorry for your neglect?
don't bother, of the two of us-
i am loathed much more,
and i am wrecked.

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please comment, even if you hate it- i enjoy the sharing, because i get to return the favor.
Written February 1st, 2005

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  • avar valley
    March 29, 2005
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    "the one thing you never
    really understand about me
    is how deep the vein
    of masochism runs:
    through my arms, my legs, my wrists."
    I love this part. It is brilliant to mine eyes. I feel if your poetry applied more of that type of metaphorical description then it would mark evolutions in your writings. I think you should definitly build on that. Good work.
    Blessed Be-
    -KTG


  • bw43
    March 23, 2005
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    i loved this. it was crazy. i loved it. i feel like a masochist too.... keep hurting me... i'll come back for more.

  • hatememorestil
    March 10, 2005
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    well- i thought you wre going to be one of those brutal but honest people- but you softened the blow- i'm glad one of us loves it- i think it's utterly ridiculous to write about self-injury, and i hated myself for doing so, but i have a deal with myself that i will include and not erase any poem i write while on this site- so here it is. thanks so much for commenting.

    blessed be

  • LifeIsALegerdemain
    March 8, 2005
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    This poetry is ridiculous.... I mean utterly ridiculous. Of course, that is in the nicest of terms. I love it!

  • Absence of Grace
    February 3, 2005
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    you are truly an amazing writer! you amaze me with everything you write...i wish i had your talent...i envy you...but i will check out the comment you left on her page, and cross my heart, ill never tell what you said....lol. once again, great write...toodles


  • blue-eyedbabe
    February 1, 2005
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    i have discovered your work and i love it...after i broke up with my boyfriend i wrote similar work...i love all your work, but this one is especially touching to me. the beginning was very gripping, but the end was the part that hit me and said...wake up, this is you.

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