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a simple sensation

a simple sensation
evoked
as a young man
walks up the stairs and
passes you right by
                   the coffee stand
                   drinking from the drip every afternoon
                   and evening
                   just as the sky turns black
against the pale, white cheeks
meant to be rose
filled with with laughter and life
but instead this
                color that even the stars cannot compare
                flickering in his eyes
                trying to be the best
                in a world where cheap perfume
                can buy love
                and if you don't run with the crowd
        you're left to
            sink
  without a single sensation
     during the aftermath.

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Written February 1st, 2005

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  • invested
    February 7, 2005
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    walks up the stairs and
    passes you right by

    I think this might read better

    walks up the stairs and
    passes you by

    Anyways I have a lot more to say but this crazy lady at the library wants tokick me off the damn computer, I'll be back to finish this critique later