sweeter than candy
hotter then blazing fires
you make me shiver
lonely sienna eyes
you touched my barren soul
be my valentine
no need for worthless words
I quiver at your caress
that says it all
I love your kisses
probing me to naughty bliss
sexy valentine
Patricia Gibson-Williams
January 31, 2005
Author notes
Written January 31st, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Contemporary - Haiku - Valentine Contest. by FifthDove.
777 points, ended February 1, 2005, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nicely done! The art is very sensual as well. I agree with Musestalker about the last verse being the strongest of the haiku, but I also like the contrast in the first verse.
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Very sensual ku's
Love is sweeter than Candy, Lovely
Cindy
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Yes I did... I do that all the time; you'd think I'd quit because I know better. Thank you for pointing it out. I fixed it. Patti
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Wonderful Write
WOWWWWWWWWWW these words are so amazing,and very vivid to these eyes. I like this very much. I give this Two Thumbs Up on this wonderful write. I so hope to read more of your work,and thank you for sharing this with my family and I
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Interesting. I think you may have meant "than" rather than "then" in the first two lines of the first haiku/stanza. The last haiku/stanza was the most perfectly true to form...and my favorite, I think.
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