These walls I've built
Their falling down
I don't know why
I'm trying to hide
Behind a brick
That's where I lie
I've given up hope
That you'll ever see
That here I am
The beautiful me
Why I love you
And can't let go
These things and more
I'll never know
I tried to make it strong
But tried and failed
My lies broke through
So here I lie
On this littered ground
As my dreams float on
And wait to be found
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Written January 31st, 2005
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This is a good one Jenn. I loved how it flowed and you really expressed yourself well. -JD
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Yeah, i read carefully and found something real good
great job man, but would mind if i say its better than best..
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My walls are all falling down too
I wish I could stop it from happening but I'm not being very successful! Nicely done. Love ya, Sonya
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This is really nice flow to it-it just has this rhythm that sort of keeps the reader interested till the end, it sucks you in. Great work here-I can relate to this. The beginning, when you talked about walls, I got a lot of visual from that, like literal walls falling and breaking and crumbling, which was cool. The whole peice is well done thanks for sharing.
~blessings~
~rora
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