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Wishing for Moonbeams



WISHING FOR MOONBEAMS

Each night I look for man in the moon
Wondering if he is looking back to see
Wiishing the light of the moonbeams
Would come down and rescue me

Then one magical night it happened
I began flying straight up to the moon
Moonbeams the colors of rainbows
Floating  high like a child's lost balloon

Looking back the world looked smaller
Felt so lost when I was back there
Nnow all my fears seem to disappear
Drifting in moonbeams without a care

I could spend days counting the stars
Or visit the heavenly constellations
Bounce around on soft white clouds
As the stars twinkle in celebration

There is no one here for me to talk to
As a feeling of loneliness sets in
Suddenly awakened back on Earth
Mind wondering where it has been

My dream come true, flew to the stars
It was not what I thought it would be
Still I look nightly for man in the moon
But no longer need him to rescue me




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I CHOSE # 2
I read, The Walk by spice12087
and I read For Jacob, by you Beth

Written January 31st, 2005

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  • Sandygram
    March 10, 2005
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    Thank you for the lovely comment. Take care, Sandy


  • March 10, 2005
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    i like your poem Sandygram, its very descriptive and charts a charming journey to the moon upon its beams, and visiting the constellations upon the clouds, then back to your bed to dream of moonbeams and magic again a very nice poem, really well written n rhymed, i enjoyed it
    ~severin~


  • Sandygram
    March 1, 2005
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    Thank you for the lovely comment. Take care, Sandy


  • Hidded Within
    February 28, 2005
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    great job origonally i thought this might have been a lil too long but it was good, perfect. thanks for entering and best of luck!!! this was a great write keep it up


  • Sandygram
    February 5, 2005
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    Thank you so much for the lovely comment. It is appreciated. Great contest. Take care, Sandy


  • PeaceChain silver member
    February 5, 2005
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    I really enjoyed this well written poem. and the moral i one many of us would do well to reflect upon.


  • Sandygram
    February 4, 2005
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    Tankks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. Take care, Sandy


  • Sandygram
    February 3, 2005
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    Thank you so much for the lovely comment. I do appreciate it. Take care, Sandy. t

  • Sandygram
    February 1, 2005
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    Thank you so much Chrisfor the nice comment. I am glad you enjoyed this little kids poem. I love writing them but thet are the hardest for me. Take care my friend. Sandy


  • Sandygram
    February 1, 2005
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    Thank you so much for the nice comment. I appreciate. Take care, Sandy


  • February 1, 2005
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    Fairy tale and romance all rolled into the one Sandy, sounds like a little inspirational poem that would go down well with many Irish loved one’s on Saint Patrick’s day. As too would truly go down well with kids being tucked in on a night time, good one for young and old alike is this poem.


  • aslanlight
    February 1, 2005
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    Awesome imagery and very descriptive. I love your moral of being happy where you are, the grass isn't always greener. Well done and good luck in the contest!

  • Sandygram
    January 31, 2005
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    Thanks so much Ann. I have no idea where this idea came from. I felt like writing a kids poem. I probably could have made it better if i waited till tomorrow to write it when I wasn't tired. I had fun writing it, that is what counts. I will talk to you tomorrow. Good night my friend. I guess I'll go and talk to the man in the moon. Take care, Sandy
    Edited on Jan 31, 9:51 p.m. because ''.


  • January 31, 2005
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    Bravo Sandy! A beautiful bedtime story! I loved with part flying strait up on the moonbeams, the color of the rainbow floating like a child's balloon. Beautiful images could feel the excitement and see the clouds, just lovely I'm smiling on the joy of the ride! Love the moral of the story, it was almost like OZ, but in this the loneliness sends her back. Fantastic! All the best in the contest, a beautiful story, Ann

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