She's so fine-tuned
wind-up doll inside her head
inside her brain,
it's all scrambled eggs and raisin toast
Butter nuts and beaver tails
Past the thing that exists; indifference
to cultures, lifetimes, genders
Give her clocks and cloaks and invisible shields
Glad shes 'oh so' sure of herself
Glad to be mad, to be sad, to be tired
'I am "oh so" much more tired than you'
'I am "oh so" much more worried than you'
'I am "oh so" much more funny than you'
Glad to be part of the time to be different
Glad to be irrelevant
Happy to serve
Happy to say
'I'm happy; Love me tender'
Author notes
Sick and tired of someone.
Written January 31st, 2005
A contest entry
- Sick and Tired Contest by Pinkypants.
300 points, ended February 4, 2005, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow this was kinda different for me...but really amazing! i love your style on this poem! its amazing! i love it!
~mandy~ -
hey hey my friend. My daddy's popped a nut. but he ain't flyin out. that's too bad 'cause i reallllly wanted you to come. also ain't going to the big T anymore. sucks eh? whatever, you can spend a couple days here than. might have to go to court though, help my bro stay here, 'cause daddy's gone insane and he doesn't give a damn, it's all about him.
Met the famous Johnny, over the phone but hey. Even sounds a bit like Depp. Freaky. To let ya know, i realllly wanted to go to the big T, but whatever. sad. might go for my b-day though, or around that time. don't wanna stay sickly lookin forever ya know.
by the way, read my poems and read the profile thing. Just not when the wardens aroung, kay? Call ya soon.
I miss miss miss ya and i love love love ya
<3 sammo -
I feel soooooooo bad for not coming. i wish I could, i really wanted to. I spent like, all night crying. And I had to put shaynes poems on here. i also spazzed out. I like, went on a hating spree. Like, hated everyone here. Now I feel really dirty. There's a siren going off, and i reallllly hope it's not my mum. Oh god, if it is i'll like, kill myself. Ugh, i'm scared now. Oh fuck please don't let it be her.I think it was a cop car. Anyways, I love ya, ahhpy b-day, wish i was there,
sad sammo -
I can't stop reading your stuff! Keep them coming. I love!
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I really liked this poem, it was powerful with the words you used, and it was very emotional. Good luck in the contest, I hope you did good in it! Keep up the great work, I look forward to your next piece, **jordan***
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I love it. It's original and it flows and it has a great ending and my computer just made a noise that sounded like a chainsaw. Oh my God, that's scary.
This was excellent.
~*~Kat C~*~ -
I spelt love wrong...
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Wow! This was great! I think the poem starts off very impressively, with the line "it's all scrambled eggs and raisin toast" (excellent!) but I feel the quality drifts off towards the end. Moreover, this poem was 2 lines over the limit but it never the less is an excellent poem. I hope you will return to it to improve the ending as I feel this poem has lots of potential!
Well done and the very best of luck with your poetry writing
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Padfoot, this comes off as a very angry poem, but that's fine. Hee Hee, Shayne isn't as oblivious as we thought, he's noticed I flirt with him...because I keep getting those e-mails from everyone, like, am I hot, am I crazy, ect. and it said, 'Am I a flirt? and he was filling it out for me and he out 'Yes, with me!Lol'. So he's not hopeless. I think I'll call you tonnight id I'm home earlt enough. I watched the Nirvana DVD. He seemed so happy at the beginnning, when it was showing clips. *sigh* still hopelessly in love. It's been so freakin warm, it's just a bit scary don't you think? Like, we just had -50, and today was +3. WTF???It's not supposed to be like this here in Feb. But hey, at least it's warm when I walk. Anyways, I did like this poem, tell me what it's about when I call you,
luves: Sammo -
awesome job with this!! i really like it, especially these lines-
"inside her brain,
it's all scrambled eggs and raisin toast"
lol, even though i took them completely out of context... still, it was a nice bit of humor in a poem like that. i hope everything turns out alright for you. again, great poem, best of wishes, and keep up the good work!!
~tyler
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wow this is a really great style
there is so much energy here and hidden meanings
but also an obvious tone-great to read something new and intruihing
ash♥
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