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As I

As I watch, my blood dries
As I listen to your angry cries

As I lie here in my bed
As the thoughts of suicide run through my head

As I wonder why I'm here
As I taste a bloody tear

As I listen to my last heart beat
I know I have given in to my defeat.

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Written January 31st, 2005

A contest entry

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  • DestiniesTwined
    March 4, 2008

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    Thanks for entering my contest. I think you did a good job with this poem. I wish you much luck in the contest

  • Smokie smokes
    February 14, 2005
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    Keri girl I can';t belive that i missed this poem. I know what you are talking about in this poem, But I'm scared for you. I don't mind myself felling like this, but not you keri, not my lil' sis... We should talk.