On the outside looking in
Is how i feel about my life.
I am always taking the safe route
Never taking a chance.
Could I just take this once risk,
Could i go for the thing i want.
Would things go different for me
Would i learn to breathe again.
But everyday I live with the realization
That i cant have the thing i truly want
And having to face it everyday
Is slowly tearing me apart.
So here i am with a decision
Should i take this chance and risk the results
Or learn to live with the way things are
And learn to love again...
Author notes
ok so another dumb one.. i am on a role!!
Written January 31st, 2005
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Strange... But I feel this poem would sound better with a rhyme... A few language tools. I'm not into the frankness of it. A little metaphors and imagery would help. The truthfulness, though, is good.
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Macey.. This is awesome. It sounds just like you.. A great description of your feelings inside. I love it.. Unfortunately, i have a problem with the other thing... haha.. like taking too many chances! lol. i love it!! Write some new ones! You are great! Love you!
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crazy macey!!!!
i love this poem so much! i mean, wow! good job! the wording is very moving lol. i like the first stanza a lot..there's great description there! good write! i like it a lot! love ya!
-brae
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not dumb at all macey! iloved it. this poem is really amazing i like the part where you say"Would i learn to breathe again" awesome line there. and this isnt dumb at alL! im happy you added a new poem!! love ya!
-meg
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