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Cheep-Cheep

Swim on water
Jump into the air
Flying fish, who would have thought?
Hit whatever is there

Must stop Mario
Must stop Mario

Waiting for an attack
Thats what we should do
But we're cheep-cheep
We aren't as smart as boo
We just jump

Must stop Mario
Must stop Mario

We could lurk
We could plot
Like most evil villians
But we just hop

Must stop Mario
Must stop Mario

We look so stupid
And maybe we are
But we do kill mario
We get pretty far

Must stop Mario
Must stop Mario

Author notes

boo~ghosts that attack mario
cheep-cheep~lil fish that attack mario

Uh-this isn't exactly "on line" gaming, but I hope its ok
And I can't really change the text, so if you could just highlight the words, I'd really appreciate it
I just like this icon a lot!
Written January 30th, 2005

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  • TooRainbow silver member
    October 8, 2005
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    Cute poem! I love the graphics although they make your words a little difficult to read. It sort of adds to the theme though. Playing video games often requires the kind of concentration and discernment that your graphics require us to use when reading this work. Overall, really nice job! I wish you luck in the contest!
    Sheryl


  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    October 4, 2005
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    Lol, This is great. You have captured the feel of the game in your poem. I did have to highlight to read, but the background truly adds to the overall effect of the poem. I don't mind highlighting in a contest such as this, and I have no clue what color type would make it easier for people to read without highlighting, but you might want to experiments a bit and see if you can play with the font colors a bit or maybe bold the type. I only say this, because it is a good fun poem and I think anyone who reads it would enjoy it. It certainly wont affect the way I judge the contest tho, I love the background in context with the content of the poem.


  • DraconicPhantom
    February 1, 2005
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    Entertaining

    Hahahaha!!!!!! This is an awesome poem! I can just hear the music from Mario playing in the background! If you put that on while you read it, it would sound SOOOO cool! Dude, you should write more like this, because this is classic!


  • StrangerInThisWorld
    January 30, 2005
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    must stop mario....hahahahahaha...im gonna say that now....