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Parting

*PARTING - A LAMENT FROM SAD OLD EDNA*

Parting is such dulcet sorrow;
My lonely heart weeps at eternal separation.
Now you are gone from me
The world is cold and empty
And a veil covers my bitter tears.

To lose my lover, my friend,
My partner through life's sad
And pointless journey...
My very soul is rent asunder and
Cast shattered on the wind.

But let me cease my whingeing! 
Upon due reflection this is but
The stuff of which cheap sentiment is composed.
As far as I'm concerned you can FUCK off
And no regrets, you stinking bastard.


Author notes

This is Edna's advice on DUMPING your lover. A lover is only a lover but a good DUMP is a good DUMP.

So go and read something decent. Make your life worthwhile, go on, asshole, click on www.allpoetry.com/poem/1481758 . God you make me puke.
Written January 30th, 2005

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  • pickers silver member
    March 16, 2007

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    Nice one

    I really enjoyed that. Gotta love a twist at the end. Thanks for making me laugh this early on a Saturday morn. (It's 10.35am)


  • Raelin
    January 19, 2007

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    What a twist. You had me sad till the end and then.....wha?! LOL Another great piece. Keep them coming and blessed be. You are a true poet.

  • dillpickle62
    November 6, 2006
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    Excellent Twist

    Holy Crap! I clicked on from another to check out your work. Jeez it's great! Unbelieveable! You really had me going in the beginning and POW! ha haha GREAT! Did you really write this 30 years ago? WOW!

  • maheo
    January 19, 2006
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    good

    Ok not sure whether I loved it or not, I guess that means it is good eh.


  • cafegroundzero gold member
    December 28, 2005
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    Please consider adopting another needy feline

    Edna, dear, I would applaud your comment on "Pogroms of America," but apparently that in a way amounts to self-praise, so just let me say thanks, and we'll leave it at that. But oh, I see you have ANOTHER POEM! Let's take a look, may I?

    Your cat died! Alas! Is that what happened? I do feel some regret for the living remaining, as the dearly departed don't have to feel, in a physical sense anyway. And that was a handsome feline. When did this happen?


  • Edna Sweetlove
    November 27, 2005
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    If you liked the cat picture, you have NO choice: go immediately to Edna's other cat poem allpoetry.com/poem/1586920 .

    Edited on Nov 27, 8:05 because ''.


  • AmoreEMorte
    September 16, 2005
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    I was recomended to read this...I like your cat...the pic is nice.


  • Robbwindow
    July 27, 2005
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    I am stopping here . The fuck of point may well get you on a favourite list will see, thanks.


  • B Chandler
    June 4, 2005
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    Parting is such dulcet sorrow;
    My lonely heart weeps at eternal separation.
    Now you are gone from me
    The world is cold and empty
    And a veil covers my bitter tears.

    To lose my lover, my friend,
    My partner through life's sad
    And pointless journey...
    My very soul is rent asunder and
    Cast shattered on the wind.

    But let me cease my whingeing!
    Upon due reflection this is but
    The stuff of which cheap sentiment is composed.
    As far as I'm concerned you can FUCK off
    And no regrets, you stinking bastard.
    ....ROFL ohhh boohooo how breaking up can be fun sometimes but anyways i just looooooooooove this write its too funny

  • Only To This Paper
    June 4, 2005
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    I think this is really good! I really like how at the beginning it seems almost to be another poem then the ending. You are so sad at the beginning but then you almost turn on the reader and completly change your direction, its really cool! Very nicely written. You have much talent.
    lost in life,
    xshadowxgirlx


  • June 4, 2005
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    I love how you were evry teary and emotional in the beginning and then completely changed. The contrast is good. Great write!

  • Edna Sweetlove
    June 4, 2005
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    WOW I won a silver prize!

  • Alces Linguista
    June 1, 2005
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    Oh wow that made me really laugh at the end. You sounded like Pride and Prejudice for the first few stanzas, and then all of a sudden - how about not.


  • masterblaster gold member
    March 16, 2005
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    Loved it, let's be honest first we cry and beat our breasts, then total depression, then,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,oh boy the anger comes out and a great poem like this, great my friend I neally cracked a rib, I would give you a trophy for this for its honesty,loved it, great


  • BlooQKazoo
    February 25, 2005
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    this is good. i like the way you twisted the end. i thought it was gonna be really sad but nice write!
    love
    polly xxx


  • HeavenScent4U
    February 23, 2005
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    This is great. It is not only funny but, I see a tinge of bitter sweet in it to. One thing, regret NOTHING. For through all things, we learn. Be Well and Be Blessed.


  • lady Rose
    February 23, 2005
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    very very good

    LOL yes I have felt this way! I enjoyed this very much it is very very well written! A fantastic piece of poetry!!!!!


  • Edna Sweetlove
    February 2, 2005
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    Dear Keith

    "Pure poetic wizardry" is praise indeed. I'm flattered.

    PS: What's this hen business hinny?

  • psyche21
    February 2, 2005
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    Hahaha.. the ending really made me laugh. I was already caught up in the sentiments of the first 2 stanzas and then wham! I'm really glad I stumbled upon this piece. Great work!

  • Edna Sweetlove
    February 1, 2005
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    My gracious thanks dear Azazel!


  • Azazel
    January 30, 2005
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    But let me cease my whingeing!
    Upon due reflection this is but
    The stuff of which cheap sentiment is composed.
    As far as I'm concerned you can FUCK off
    And no regrets, you stinking bastard.

    Ha, I love that ending, way to stick it to 'em.
    Great write, keep it up an keep writing.
    -AZ-


  • Keith
    January 30, 2005
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    What pure poetic wizardry, and no mistake. Tell it how it is, hen! Let it all out, ye'll feel a lot better.

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