The one that once kept my heart burning
Is now the one that turned it black
The one that is portrayed as an angel
Is truly the devil in the flesh
The one I once called mine
Is now something I wouldn't even glance at
The one that I once knew
Is now a complete stranger
The one I used to dream about
Is now the that haunts my nightmares
The one that held my heart up high
Is now the one that dropped and shattered it
The one that once filled my heart with life
Is now the one that killed me
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Written January 30th, 2005
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I really liked this, I love the positive and the negitive written out like that. So very good and well written. I really enjoyed this and thought you have expressed yourself quite well. Wonderful write and thank you for sharing it.
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the last line was really off...too - killed me...ended suddenly...or something..i dont know. in any case, good job overall. enjoyed.
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i agree with everyone here, great job! oh, and in the 10th line you forgot to say 'one' heheh, just thought i would let ya know.
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dude you are such a good poet!!whats upp
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Love the passion
Love the lines ...
The one that once kept my heart burning
Is now the one that turned it black
I think I dated this bum too, the devil part clinches it!
Good job, Love the passion! -
excellent!
Betrayal! I love it. I can relate to alot of what you're saying in this poem, getting your heart trampled by the one you love, being scorned by those you care about. As for the poem, excellent imagery and great use of emotion. This brought up alot of old memories, thank you for posting. -
emotional
Angry and mad!! Very passionate; forget him and find someone who will read your poetry!!! Well done nice write I enjoyed reading it
G
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