Politicallity usurps a soul
By stripping it of all its useful worth,
Preserving self it's overwhelming goal,
It's ego stifles wisdom's needed birth.
All goals are lost within its smoth'ring hold,
And honesty is cast before the wind.
Respect and honor gone, they have been sold,
And somehow it knows not that it has sinned.
It's all a game they say, that's how it works.
It's life and that's the way we have to live.
But hidden 'neath the lies, disaster lurks,
And truth is squelched by it, and held captive.
Political - a word whose sound rubs raw,
Those o'er extended parts I can't withdraw.
Author notes
Just sitting around thinking today. All comments encouraged and welcomed as usual.
Since so many of the first readers of this poem mention that they don’t quite understand it, I thought I’d just add this to my comments to hopefully help a little. Its intent is to relate particularly, but not exclusively, to organizations – ones in which the people involved in the organization become wrapped up in preserving their position and their power, and in so doing neglect and sometimes even subvert the purpose and function of the organization. For instance, if the officers of a charity become so taken with maintaining their position and rank within the charity and securing their power base, and this seemingly becomes their most important duty, then the function of the charity is hindered and those who it is supposed to serve, are not served as they should be. And, it would apply to politics in general also, with basically the same description – the end result being that those who are to be served and helped are not served and helped as they should be. A simple problem, not just of our time but present every since humans began to organize.
Written January 29th, 2005
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Great poem!! I really don't care much for politics, though I could get into them if I really tried. However, I've ALWAYS thought the exact same thing that you wrote down. Politics have a horrible effect on people, totally removing all honesty and integrity. Very good. -
It reminds me of something Winston in 1984 would write in his precious journal. Very well done, I enjoy how it flows and rhymes.
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Yes. Sometimes it's like that.
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Great Piece!
This would be an interesting concept to study in sociology. This is a wonderful poem, and the ide behind can lead one into discussions for days.
I was reading over your author page and enjoyed it very much. You were an engineer? So much math would probably lead to my death.
This is a very fine poem, and I agree with it completely! Keep up the good work.
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Awesome job dad!! It's too bad that,that is how the world is today, it's truly sad. Awesome poem though, lots of power in the words. keep it up!! love ya.
~Sara~
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Paul, my friend, truer words have ne'er been said! Such lies hidden behind such beautiful promises they do make. Excellent job on this wonderful poem!! Hugs, Patricia
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Is this adout politics or interpesonal relationships? Applying "politicallity" to an interpersonal relationship is much different than in the public arena. Dealing with disparate opinions of the public versus a one to one relationship is very different. Reading this, it seems to me you are trying to make it universal which doesn't work. However, I'll applaud you for applying the sonnet form well to a topic other than love.
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liked it
i wouldn't have called this a sonnet myself, but thats just me. i liked this piece, though. keep it up -
Just out of curiosity what is your political stance? I like the poem. I am glad to see that there are other people out there worrying about politics. I unfortunately have not written anything political in awhile. So Cheers
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The message is true and comes through strongly. I agree. Politics has a way of casting a cloud on good character and distorting honest intentions. (I became weary of hearing so much political rambling in this past elections) I thought this worked well in the sonnet structure and you are always flawless with meter and rhyme.
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Very nice. Very true. I liked it enormously.
Just one suggestion: The line
"And somehow it knows not that it has sinned." seems to me to lose the rhythm. Isn't there one syllable too many? It seems to me it should be:
"And somehow it knows not it has sinned."
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really cool poem. it flows perfectly and your rhyming is great. i like it alot, and everything said in it is very true. Anywho, great write so keep writing, and have a nice day.
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cool
Politics are immensely annoying. All in the name of political correctness, the Government is slowly depersonalizing the English Language. Great write here, well done.
Moody Blues
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Hi Paul,
I like the content and the message comes through very well. Not sure the subject matter fits the confines of the sonnet form all that well, but you have put it together in a very readable manner. The serious "wrenching" of the accent on "captive" was a bit of a stumble for me, but I don't have a suggestion for another wording.
I like your style, Paul...bold and forthright.
Regards,
Del -
Lovely sonnet which I liked a lot, great write Keep writing because this was fantastic- note to people afraid of 'big words'- there's another big word for you (dictionary!)
Keep writing, this was fantastic
All the best,
Pozo
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interesting. different. not sure what its about. im thinking politics, duh. but i dont know. anyways. good job with writing this. was worth the read.
Blu -
Im guessing this was a good poem but there was too many big words again...lol...um...so yes...ill talk to you later!
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resepct to you for making a powerful sonnet without getting lost in trying to make it work...but im really sorry i don't quite get it...but i really want to, so if you could enlighten me that would be great!
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interesting. im not srue what the point your making is though. seems a bit cryptic to me. perhaps im just lazy.
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well, i have been studying sonnets in school and tried my hand at a few of my own, i really enjoy them. I must say, this is a very well written sonnet, although it's meaning is escaping me... course, I'm a little brain dead at the moment, so that could have something to do with it. the thing i like most about sonnets, is when you can write them without the rhyme or meter being force - like, you can say what you want to say, without using a word, simply because it rhymed or fit the meter, which you did, most excellently, i must say!
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A great write
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wow...I'm no good at sonnets, but this is amazing! it's very deep...and some of the meanings hidden...I like the imagery portayed here, aswell.
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great great job as usual ...i need to try to write one of these...maybe after i get rid of this writers block..anyhoo...keep it up Paul...God Bless
tyler -
WOW This is great, and so true. You are extremely talented and it is a privlidge to call you a friend Im still working on my sonnet lol Maybe someday
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Hey You,
Another sonnet.. no surprise there, they seem to be your favourite
Still haven't tried to write one yet.. hmm maybe after exams are over I'll give it a shot.
As for the poem, very well done yet again - I checked all the syllables as I always do with sonnets and it looks good to me -can't stay I actually understand the poem, because I don't, in all truthfulness.. but maybe it's intended to be that way because I'm sure there's a story behind the words.
Got me thinking, that's for sure.. great work!
Becca
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