If you only knew
how the things
you say and do
can touch me -
Soft and bright
as sunlit blossoms
dipped in dew
And every moment
that you speak to me
is one more glimpse
of bliss beyond
uncertainty
Though years and
oceans may divide,
the simple truth
shall here abide -
That you are loved
And with
the purest
pride
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♥ : song
Written January 29th, 2005
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Aw, this was so very sweet and precious
It's amazing the smallest things can mean so very much to someone.
This was indeed a very romantic and heartfelt love poem
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And every moment
that you speak to me
is one more glimpse
of bliss beyond
uncertainty
this was a beautiful piece of poetry and captures the essence of the rest of the poem perfectly,very lovingly written and a tender and thoughtful piece,thanks for entering my contest and good luck
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what an incredible work of heart this is to the one you love, it flows like the nectar from the flower to the be, and makes honey of two hearts co-joined. you have penned a remarkable tribute, and he is a lucky man indeed,
I hope you send this to him and show him the depth of your feelings, but i doubt he will see the bottom. nevertheless I saw the beauty wrapped in words around tis masterpiece..great write..artis
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a bit of cliche and a bit of depth spilled here and there, heartfelt pieces radiate sincerity everywhere, imagery bonds the reader with the poet and for erratic intervals we feel what you feel - might be a bit stereotypical-mushy but its great in general, its a lot of effort i guess. i like the form, btw.
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Pretty
Sweet lovely poem
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Such beauty
This is extremly soft and gentle, like liquid silk. Im in awe of your pen, this is the first i have read of your work but i will certainly be viewing more, fantastic
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This is a beautiful poem very pictureesque...keep it u
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Inimitable!!
Ouff!!To read in the middle of the night such distinguished poetry is transcending all the sleep i am not getting.. Truly incomparable poetry! C'est tres tres beau!! Do all in love and kindness, the powerful secret behind a successful relationship. A dream poem. Love and blessings xx
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Very pretty! Great work.
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Should of known it was yours. It has the soft scent of your spirit wafting all around it. Beautiful song Maat. One only you could of penned!~~Suseann
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"Though years and
oceans may divide"
Ahhh, G. ~ time & distance can never separate two hearts that yearn for each other...Beautifully penned, my Friend...Succinct, powerful, pure & true...
Wanda
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Hi, good morning am jut having coffee before going to work,and this is just the kind of poem I need to start my day, it is beautiful and gentle on the mind, a very lovely read, all the best and may this coming year be filled with joy, Di, ps am out of applauses the time difference can be a right pain
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Gorgeous.
I love this. The words flow so smoothly that if you spoke it out loud they would drip off the tongue like honey
"Soft and bright
as sunlit blossoms
dipped in dew"
I like how you phrased it as "dipped in dew"-- very good imagery. well done! -
awwwwwwwww this was lovely and powerful
It gave me tears in my eyes..this was breathtaking and I can't believe I've not read this one before!!!
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Obviously a very deep man with strong romantic feelings love and respect for someone who is a wonderful and loving woman.. Very luck to be able to say it in a way that touches the heart...Bon Ton Ron
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aww yeah I like this.
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A poem that made my day
Bazza stole my lines but he lives 140 km away from me so that is understandable. The thought tugs the hearts of your admirers I would guess. The poem is beauty in sound, music, words, phrasing and shapliness of poem. Fifty poems of this standard would sell, illustrated, in the English speaking world very well indeed. I love the three rhymes, musically echoing down the lines, arpeggio in effect. You progress in logical sequence amazingly of a mystical relationship.
Thank you for this read. It is worthy of the gold you received for it. -
congrats goldie
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Welcome to the winners circle, my dear friend! This was BRILLIANT! I LOVED EVERY SECOND OF IT! I WAS BLOWN AWAY! This was more than EXACTLY what I was looking for! Well done!
Maggie -
beautiful that was very beautiful indeed. keep up the great writing. love
~celeste~ -
Brilliant and beautiful.
Beautifully written and exquisitly painted without recourse to falmboyant and superfluous frills. Sincere and straight to the point but elegantly simple. -
This is awesome! I love it! Great write and good luck in the contest! (I love the picture too)
Lots of love*
RLL -
Wow short and sweet.I really liked it.Keep up the good work
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I really think that your an greta writing and people that write like you make me wanna write even more
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Your poetry sings out with such a special feeling. It really has something very special within it. I am looking for the right words to put to how wonderful this poem feels but I am at a loss for words. Its like I can feel the beauty of your heart within the poem. Nicely done...
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fantastic my friend!
This poem touched my heart deeply my friend. With every word I could feel such emotion and feeling. FANTASTIC! -
yeha that is what I am talking about. You already wrote it. I have got to quit reading love poems...
I am getting itchy and I profess to be happily single. I really am that, but man I could do with a touch of romance..
this is wonderfully expressed.
susan -
oh wow, simple short and amazing this is awesome and you did a great job with it! I love it its truly beautiful and just what i asked for great job! and good luck
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Thank you, Susannah!
That's high praise from one who writes and prefers prose. 
~G
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r this is so gentle WOW
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wow this is really beautiful....*
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That was a great write...i liked it alot...good job.. keep on writing.. im in love and i love being in love...!!!
*-AmberLeigh-*
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sweet and kind.
A very good description of love and appreciation. I wish that there were more people like you in this world. -
This was so amazing! I truly enjoyed this! Thank you for entering!
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Beautiful!
Oh how I enjoy your simplicity! I always sense an innocense in your poetry that is soothing. -
the imagery is terrific... and the picture fits so well. very well penned, wouldnt change a thing.
-olivia -
Great
This is beyond instant gratification.
We take many things for granted, including things of the mental nature.
Lovely job,
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Simple pure and true this poem is in its best form just as you have it short but deep amazing
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This is a gorgeous poem. I really like the way you write. You use great vocabulary, and the concepts are easy to relate to. This is really good work! I wish you the best in the contest! ~Val
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Thank you for your kind comment and applause, Mary! Your wishes are most appreciated.
~G
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Very beautiful poem! Good Luck in this Contest!
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This is an ode to love and to the one you love.
Short, simple, deep and with the exact measure to touch any heart.
Loved it!
Kisses,
Mari
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Great
Man, that was good. If this poem does not win the gold. The person must be blind. This was a great poem. I loved it. Keep up the work and good luck -
Thank you so much, Mary!
It is very gratifying to me to hear that what I write can have that effect.
~G
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This pure loveliness. Every work of yours that I have read has left me feeling peaceful and soothed. This is graceful and moving and I, very much, enjoyed the reading.
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Thank you, Lord G! So glad you liked it.
~G
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Great Piece!
A wonderful piece, dear Maatkara. I loved every line of it!!! A great, wonderful piece!
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Thanks Col! Not overused in that combination that I'm aware of: 'Though years and oceans may divide'. Bit hard to substitute 'those big expanses of salty water in between', wouldn't you say? lol!
~G
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this is indeed out of your box Gen..a pleasant departure and i like it but i have to say that oceans divide has been somewhat overused in the past
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Your right, I can't beat that.
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Oh my gosh, Sharron! You crack me up! "Wedding Song" LOL! Sheesh! OK, you can have it as yours
~G
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TRUE GOLD! WEDDING SONG!
VERDICT WEDDING SONG! Inscribed in a heart that sings in TRUE GOLD!
If I ever get married, can this song be sung at my wedding?
From “Only You” until the last line I am left breathless.
This song needs to be set to music and sung on the airwaves ASAP.
Oh, please set this to music and “Dance me to the end of love”.
As you raise all of us in one cerise rose of divine love.
What else can we expect from the heart of a modern master?
A timeless love song in one lily breath of divine love
Above a cerise rose that will shine in the ever after!
Genelle you leave me breathless each time I dance upon your pages of love.
You have a gift to raise us to the shores of universal love.
This is a masterpiece of your soul. WOW and WAIT for me. Namaste Blessed Be.
You have shown me that “less is more”. Moreover, this song is a perfect example of grace
Elegance and I love you forever. What more could you ever say then this timeless sacred kiss?
I especially cherish the use of pink and blue. Symbolic for a boy and a girl
So simple yet so complex this never-ending dance of love and beauty.
This song is so exquisite in content form and of Coors well written in all your elegance
I am Vermished! I cannot say what I really mean. It’s so lovely it is so tender and beautiful that I’m dancing above in your holy divine sacred love. The rose looks like a velvet rose on the midnight blue page. This song has to win the Gold or I do not know the meaning of love. This is the purest touch of love I’ve danced deeply within since the touch of Love Song. Thank you my dear sweet sister soul for caring to share this song of love with all of us. "Dance me to the end of love"!
Utterly Beautiful in your stunning divine artistry! Oh my oh my Genelle dancing so gracefully in your cerise rose of heavenly love. Oh you show me s l o w l y the dance of divine love.
The image of the rose drifting on the page is gorgeous! Everybody wants a rose when they are in love. It makes me think deeply in your golden threads of love. Your last four lines “dance me as a burning violin”. Powerful and speak directly to my heart of hearts. I love you as you unfold the divine rose in all our hearts and souls. When are you sending me the invitation to the Wedding?
This is a Wedding Song for sure. I for one would like this song of love to be sung at my Wedding!
As I laugh and hear my mother, say, “Marry a Jewish Doctor” ROTFL!
Oh my have I got news for her. Love & Light Sharron.
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that friend you write of is a lucky soul
like a sip of water, this is refreshing, and tantalising, how it strokes the emotions of the reader
. .well felt piece
mike
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Truly beautiful leaves a word of thought impressed in my mind here “ speak to me echo in my heart “ dear me my quotes today are better than my poems I fear. Truly this is the thought that hit me while reading this truly tender piece of literal art. Enjoyed much indeed.
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This is gorgeous. I have said this is a million times before to you, but if I could write like this- first of all it would be a more accurate description of what I feel like inside, and how I experience things, but also I would not have any self consciousness. I don't know how you do it- I guess you just have a natural talent that we all can only wish in our dreams that we had
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Of course, my friend! I would be honoured for you to use them.
Namaste,
~G
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There is someone to whom I can just send these words as it is, and they will convey the feelings of my heart! Will you permit?
Very well written,
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Thank you for your wonderful comment, Nicci!
Especially from you: one who writes such exquisite love poems!
~G
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Pure love...!
The beauty and the depth of love...this is what I got from this poem. Simple, yet so effective, so heartfelt - love as gentle as the pink rose, bedewed, life-giving! Not often that I see your rhyme, but wow...you may, you may! I too loved the line "one more glimpse of bliss beyond uncertainty" - stunning in its poetic depth, beauty and imagery. A poem that speaks of love in every word - and yes, the purest pride in this love that spans across time and sand. Lovely work, Gennelle! You make me want to write a love poem right now!!
~ Nicolette
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Thank you Myra!
I always appreciate helpful feedback from such literary luminaries as yourself.
~G
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Ah Gennelle -- better yes. Bright in my mind was rhyming with the suggested Light ... and whether you've choosen that end rhyme or not, bright still rhymes through assonance with divide, abide and pride ...
As it is now, bright is a strong word, within focus due to its placement.
I am so thankful that you slip into suggestions with such flair. Viva la Love!
Myra -
Thank you, Myra! There is no end-rhyme for 'bright' though. And if I changed 'pride' to "Light" it would change the intended sense and meaning; i.e. to love with 'purest pride' is in pure Light, without shame or possessiveness.
~G
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Lovely purity
Divinely beautiful ... I would shift "as" to the next line (6th) so that bright could get the benefit of the important end-rhyme (the same goes for OF, AND and THE -- these words are "empty" endline-words ... never use those in such an important visual and auditive position -- easy to rectify: move it to the following line). And I would have replaced "pride" with LIGHT. Of course ... IF IF IF it was MY poem
Myra
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Thank you, Margaret!
Ah, I knew I could count on you to clear that up for me. I was tossing up whether to add punctuation, or just leave it to the line breaks. I shall put a comma there, though a capital on the beginning of the next might have worked. Thank you again for your attention to those important details, it is always most appreciated.
~G
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Blissful
Dear Gennelle, this is a wonderful love. I especially like "bliss beyond uncertainty", maybe because it is in my thoughts lately.
If commas are not anathema, I would like to see one after "divide", to prevent the rush of enjambment with the following line.
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Thank you, Steve! A "departure"?
~G
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quiet a nice pure and simple truth ... and a bit of a departure, very well done
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