Runawaytrain, a beautiful inferno,
comes out of nowhere
on a gleaming highway,
a violet night at her back,
bound for greatness.
Desperate winds
float on the waves of a velvet desert,
as she speeds by, her silver bullet pen bleeding
exquisite black death
and excruciating confessions of first love.
The Metroliner races along a one way
rail, her sleek lines dazzle under a
stellar screen inspiring all in her wake
with warm chills and
a remarkable gift of kindness and prose.
Author notes
Written January 29th, 2005
A contest entry
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1200 points, ended February 10, 2005
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Oh, it's nice to see someone write something very profound about the train and how it delivers such mixed messages! Excellent..excellent.
Desperate winds
float on the waves of a velvet desert,
as she speeds by, her silver bullet pen bleeding
exquisite black death
and excruciating confessions of first love<------ that part actually made me cup my fist to my chest and feel the PAIN. Oh!
This reminded me of one I wrote a few years back. When you get time, grace me with the read!
Sad Like A Train
allpoetry.com/poem/449871/
So glad I took Danna's suggest to read something
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The second stanza is my most favorite of them all!!! I stumbled upon your website from Danna Hobart's website and I must say I am happy for that! I look forward to reading more of your work!
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And this poem has a very good chance Runawaytrain. Thanks for entering keeper of the menagerie.
dtp
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well, it was an easy poem to write, my friend.
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Awwwwww, I don't know what to say... I am honored that you chose me, and you said such nice things. I hope you win!
Edited on Jan 29, 11:43 p.m. because ''.
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