Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Like One of Those

Just when I’m beginning to get it
everything seems to unravel
like one of those trick knots;
you pull the string and it comes apart in your hands?

You pull the string and I come apart
(everything’s a trick in your hands);
just when it seems I’m beginning to get it
I’m not, and I unravel.

Just… you’re not everything!
I get it; your trick seems to unravel
when I pull the string...
and you’re beginning to come apart in my hands.

Author notes

Another twisty phrase piece that wouldn't stop playing in my head this morning.  Hopefully this has exorcized the demon...
Written January 28th, 2005

In a list

What did you think

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • Shiny New
    February 1, 2005
    Edit | Reply

    Yup!

    I love the gift of your sharing who and where you are.......
    How wonderful to be mirrored in such a way!
    You express the dialog and the tantra beautifully

  • Lilac Moon silver member
    January 28, 2005
    Edit | Reply
    Thanks for your kind comment, Hawoe!

    Lilac Moon

  • hawoe
    January 28, 2005
    Edit | Reply

    2 thumbs up

    Hey this is a good poem!! I can relate to it and I love how you show yourslef as a knot. That's cool.