Held beautifully transfixed
within the arms of eternity.
That stirs arising passion,
within the depths of ones soul.
Soothing it refreshes as a
gentle whisper in the night.
Harmonising melodies that play
as sweet tempting desires.
Evoking the dance of romance
upon hearts which fate smiles.
Embraced so tenderly with
a kiss of sweet surrender.
And kindled flames ignited
by the very breath of love.
Under a blanket of stars
and a moonlit silhouette.
Where we stand together
before the altars of time.
Author notes
Written January 27th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Make Me Happy On My Birthday? :D by Jaffa-.
480 points, ended October 13, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
1 - 81 of 81
-
Very beautiful with amazing emotional depth.
Wonderfully written and has a brilliant flow and rhythm.
Lovely imagery and i just adored the background.
Very well done and thanks for sharing. xx -
Very beautiful write!
I love your word usage and imagery in this piece.
Bravo
♥ kate -
Oh my God, I just love this!
These parts are absolutely amazing,
"Held beautifully transfixed
within the arms of eternity."
"Evoking the dance of romance
upon hearts which fate smiles."
and
"Under a blanket of stars
and a moonlit silhouette.
Where we stand together
before the altars of time."
Great job!
Thank you so much for your entry and all the best to you!
P.S. I'm putting you on the finalists' list.
♥ Char
-
Wow, I know I read this before, thought I even commented on it, well if I didnt I should have, I totally love this write, once again you increase my level of admiration, love, dreams, in descriptive words, laying it all out there, way to go. luv ACM
-
Aww i'm currently in love with someone i can never have right now, this poem kind of hurts lol. Its beautiful and reminds me of times i have spent with her, pain...
-
any porch or tree our moonscape offers a place to stand on the edge of eternity, and embrace each other tightly as you tumble into the depths of each others eyes, and float in the joy of sheer bliss found only in tow sets of arms emclsed and searching for more love, and tighter bonds...Artis
-
A very beautiful piece of poetry. Absolutely wonderful. I love it, as always.
--Animaechick
-
This poem rocks. I'm not saying that just because you wrote it.
The kind of romance you have captured here is beyond time, space, and visual boundaries. The utter beauty of your words wraps itself around your reader and heightens their spirits--not to mention, it brings smiles to many faces.
I wish I could write about love like that. However, right now is not a time of optimism for me, and the words would ring too hollow anyway--always coming back to mock me
Wishing you the best of luck in the contest...
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
-
Very good
Truly a great piece! Every part of this is so good, and meshes perfectly. So glad I met you on here. Wish I could express myself as passionately as you do about love. Wish I could be as optimistic. -
Exquisitely Romantic
This was a very beautiful poem tying in romance in its timelessness and musical atmosphere. You are very talented, please keep on with your penning. Take care, Heather -
Ah, an exquisite piece you have penned here. Lovely in structure and content. Bursting with images and mood. Romantic poetry at its best. (I also love this background).
-
It is very romantic and it drew me in.. i loved it. great job.
Edited on Jan 29, 5:24 p.m. because ''. -
Beautifuly flowing write,honored to have read your work. Thank you.
-
Sensual and vibrant
THANK YOU! I signed up for this site yesterday and was beginning to wonder if it was a mistake. I was only finding one out every five or so poems that I dug. Wonderfully read aloud, this is what words are for. I'll be spending quie a bit of time on your page! Danke Ciao! -Syl -
Perfection
Wow, what a beautiful master piece by the Best Poet ever. Each time you sit and compose a poem for All of us we are so Blessed with Your wonderful glowing talent. Its like You have this awesome ability to just reach right out and pull your readers right into you and share your warm love with them through your wonderful words of inspiration. I hope you know that many of us look up to you as a poetic leader. It happens to us every time you write, our smiles appear and always glow real bright. Your Number One Reading Fan, MickPigKnuckles
-
sounds like a beautyful romance novel
well written flows great -
Oh my God! This is such a beautiful poem. I really enjoyed reading this. I thought it was an awesome poem, I don't care what anybody says about this.. This poem rocked. It was so sweet and of course, full of love. I normally dislike greatly reading love poems but this was amazing. Wonderful write, great job!!
-
Omgosh, that was really good!! I loved it!
It really flowed together well and I could imagine everything in my mind. Great work! 
-
It's so beautiful and elegant and so well writen with the best flow.
Great Job -
Im am speechless, I love it.
-
Thank you so much for the lovely comment and the smile. Your a sweetheart
Lena
-
this is beautiful i really like the background
compliments the romance in your write
i always like to read romantic sincere poems
because it gives hope for relationships
ash
-
Your words are as stunning as the picture you have choosen to present them with. It is filled with romance and tenderness. Totally beautiful work sweetie. You are such a visionary. I adore your work, your talent and the person you have been blessed to be. Stunning.
Sam
-
My god that's beautiful. It makes me feel like life is worth living.
-
this great poem reminds me of the wedding of someone i know..the couple opted to get married on top of a mountain, exchanged vows in poetry...by themselves..no minister/priest,witnesses and such, actually no permits, contracts and such too...lol ..a mutual promise (unwritten)..before the altars of time....
-
THIS WAS AWESOME!! This is an amazing poem... worded so beautifully and so meaningful... you did an amazing job with this! BRAVO!!! This just magnificent... great job!
-
Your poem has great flow and it is obvious you've spent a lot of time picking just the right words. Yet I can't help but get cavities while reading...this is too idealistic for my taste, and it really doesn't have that much depth. Nonetheless, I am sure others will enjoy reading it much more than myself.
-
Great flow. It was a really sweet poem. I love the last four lines with the moonlit silhouette, standing together and the altars of time. Amazing imagery and awesome poem!
-
Excellent
Makes me think of arabian knights, satin cushions and seduction...( probably not what you were trying to image )Delightful poem with a wealth of appeal.
-
Serious kudos. I'm definitly a fan of short poetry, and this is so...elegant, beautiful, straightforeward.
within the depths of ones soul.
That is the only thing that is a smidgen rough to me. Needs a little...less? -
Great poem. The love is just leaking out of it. Very emmotional and very sweet. Great Write!!
-
Great
Excellent, I thought this flowed easily with great use of vocabulary. Well done! -
wow.. i don't know where to start. this poem was great, the imagery, the language, all very thought provoking. awesome.
-olivia- -
As usual you have done it again, woderful poem with beautiful visuals, flow as smooth as silk, a woderful poem on love, you always seem to have a magical touch when you write, very beautiful. it's a winner
-
I'm not always overly keen on love poems but this one gets my thumbs up. The imagery is fantastic and it flowed all the way through. This is a truly beautiful piece of art!
-
mmm... what incredible imagery! I truly enjoyed reading this beautiful piece, it has a definate "feel" to it.
Astral Wolf -
amazingly written, such a unique piece, whilst htis style iosi a staple of many poets, it is rarely actually used as they develop uniquely, but here it is shown what an awesome stlye it is and why it is a staple i guess. free form flowing, imagery was, as everyone here is saying, exccellenet, the title is very good, an intriguing titlte making me want ot read more, so yeah, and on a difficult topic. congrats on such a good write
-
WOW!!! beautiful imagery and great flow. the free verse worked very well here and you explained the beauteous surroundings of the scene wonderfully! i like every bit of it! great job!! if all your other works, (which I plan to check out), are as good--i mean great---as this, i'll be very envious!! wonderful! keep up the good work!
-
WOW!!!
This poem was well worth the read and the imagery was great. I don't know what to say. -
Amazing, simply amazing. So elegant, and graceful. An excellent all around mood and setting. And I love the title, "Altars of Time". So blatantly whimsical. Very nice job.
-
Crazy stuff dude. Amazing. and its shorter than most of the other good stuff. I like that. Short but sweet amazing job again that shite must be hard to write...woo hoo~! keep it up.
~R|$KY~ -
Splendid!
A beautiful poem, a classic marvel, PS.
This will make the contest difficult for all of the others involved.
-
excellent
This is a fantastic love poem so well expressed.Beautiful showing emotion coupled with imagery. Thank you for sharing .Very well done -
Wow. How beautiful. The imagery was so intense and the poem was... relaxing. I loved it. Write on. ~~SpydurPoet~~
-
this beautiful absoultly amazing. i loved it. it was so elegant and writen so lovely. great job! ill look for you work more in the future.
-
awwwww............. this is a really nice poem. you put a lot of emotion into it. also, I really liked this bg. lol excellent write overall
-
i love the imagery is all i can say. keep up the good work
-
Lovley
Very lovely poem, Lena! You never fail to amaze me with every word that escapes from your pen - and with such consistency too. Lovely gentle and deep poem of love and I just love the title! A poem with wings that whisper gently...beautiful work! Good luck in the contest, my friend (I have seen this contest, but is yet to come up with something original, lol) - I am can learn from you!!
~ Nicolette
-
applauds you
wowsers is this how you got the titles for yor contest??? Beatifully written girlie girl -
Lovely!
Now I think you used all the titles up in your current contest....You silly girl... I like this, you have uniqueness, and you know it's true, you know it!
Thanks for sharing your talent here my dear, and as witty as you are, you know I'll be back for more! And cute too!
Much
, Timothy The Poetic Weaver
and 
es
-
THE BEST EVER A+!
WOW!! This is absolutely breathtaking. one of the best poems i've read on allpoetry so far. Excellent job. the descriptions and the imagery and the word choice, just perfect. I have no applause left for today but you deserve another one great job!!! -
Beautiful!
I'd see you have all titles in this piece, well...you really deserved all the applause, it perfectly goes with the background and your thoughts was so powerful to ignite our hearts and redeem the soul for eternal love. This is something very refreshing and inspiring in every way. -
AMAZING!
Amazing! that's all i can say, amazing! This epitomizes exactly what i've thought love was like for a long time, though i've never been in love because my high school sucks. But, thank you for sharing this! -
I love the background. The imagery in the poem is very nicely done. Good job on the poem, it was very much enjoyed.
-
passionite... I don't know quite what to say... other than that... keep penning ~kitsune~
-
Lovely bits of imagery here. Good use of language. There is a bit of a disjointed feel to this for me, though. Combined with the background, that disjointed feeling made me feel as if I was floating for a moment or two. Interesting.
-
such wonderful descriptions in this piece. the poem was good, you used a good word choice and this poem was not just something thrown into the featured box in hopes that someone would read it. very nice. it reminds me of my personal times with my best friend. i think about him when i see all the beautiful things he has created. the blanket of stars especially is my favorite. thanks for writing such a wonderful piece.
love you
micheal
friendofsinners -
LMAO what I just assumed you liked me
-
the stars have indeed danced within your eyes and left the sweet tingle of romance behind ..... so very nice
-
Great read
Very nice poem with great flow well packaged intellectually charged. -
if you would like to be judged, you need to submit the 25-point entry fee.
-
Wonderful
Amazing imagery. I think that the background added to the beauty of this piece. Good work -
crystaldust 27-01-05 21:56
This is gorgeous - youthful, starry-eyed amid the starry background.
It's as though you are skipping across the stars and running riot with being in love. Which is excactly as it should be. Words just right, form pretty good. One little thing, though: it's "Altars", not "alters", unless you really do mean changes, in which case you need to use a noun not a verb. Pity to spoil it with a slip like this one. -
You captured the essence of love first tasted. It has an eternal flavor indeed. Very graphic word detail and you leave little for the imagination to try to fill in. I might suggest you check the spelling of harmonizing and your use of "within" twice, tripped me up on the forth line since you had already used it in the second line. Just a minor misstep that could be easily corrected. I am sure you will do well in the contest, this is an excellent work. Good luck.
-
I am breathless. I really like this poem it reminds me of falling in love. Beautifully written!
-
Very nice
Very nicely done. The imagery evokes the thoughts of lovers on the edge of each other. There are a few places where punctuation would enhance the reading. And the words "Alters" means to change. Did you perhaps mean "Altars"? That would be a place of either sacrifice or pay homage. All in all, a good read. Thank you for sharing. -
Just lovely
Loved this bit
Embraced so tenderly with
a kiss of sweet surrender.
And kindled flames ignited
by the very breath of love.
-
Very touching...good luck in the contest!
-
BEautiful lena!I hope that you do well in this contest!
-
AMAZING POEM
This was simply beautiful in every way. The imagary was fantastic. What a pleasure to read. Take care, Sandy
-
Astounding!
I nearly drowned in the beautiful romanticness of this beautiful write! Your images are wihtout words! without descritions! without limited praise! boundless and wonderous. Yes, dear PurpleSky, allow me to dance along your sidereal silhouette. Another spellbinding piece! Another diamond more precious than gold from your imagination and spirit! -
Lalala la Love it.
-
This is beautiful i used to beleive in love but right now i just dont think that their is anyway that you can meet someone and be together 4ever its ludacris!the background is beautiful too anyway keep up the good work love ya chelle
-
love the poem it was awesome and the background is just beautifull
-
Oh hon, it's beautiful! I love it! Everything that is true romantic love! Speechless! You covered everything visual inspiring to the depths of feeling in a lover's soul....All the best in the contest, OUTSTANDING! Love and hugs, Ann
-
GREAT
This is a very beautiful, gently flowing and well written piece. I really enjoyed reading it. You can feel this "sweet" surrendering as you read it. -
Nice job on this poem of love. I liked this part best~~~~~~~~
Evoking the dance of romance
upon hearts which fate smiles.
Embraced so tenderly with
a kiss of sweet surrender.
~~~~Love and Light~~~~
~~Blaze~~ -
I really like your poem. So emotional!
"Embraced so tenderly with
a kiss of sweet surrender.
And kindled flames ignited
by the very breath of love."
That is my favorite part! It is so wonderful! The imagery and the personification of love. I truly adore this piece! Congratz to you! And good luck on the contest! -
WOW! I meen... wow.....wow!I love your love poetry! This is soo romantic! I like the flow of the smoothness!
Eny
-
Tender...
Nice job! I really enjoyed the visuals.."a kiss of sweet surrender" I remember those. Very romantic,sweet,filled with hope & togetherness. Good Read....nice wording. All around perfection!! Good Luck! I think you deserve to win! -
"oh my gosh this is the most beautiful background ever" seriously purplesky, this i beautiful, just as much as the poem is beautiful, your work is great, and i look forward to each and every write that you post here on AP. have a great super fun lovely day purplesky!!!!!!!!!!byebye.
take care, Brittany.
Adding your comment:
1 - 81 of 81
39 old applause
