I'll never be myself again until I can look
at you and walk away.
Someday I'll have to test it,
But right now there's no point.
Because if I were close enough to see you,
you'd run before i 'd never walk.
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Written January 27th, 2005
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WOW! i loved this. I can totally relate to this one... wowoowowow... this touched me. wow. all i can say is wow. it was amazing.
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This is a good poem, a little short though. But short can be good. Well, onto the other poems it is...i'll try =) -TV
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oh goddess, no! kind criticisms from other poets never ever bother me. i appreciate them wholeheartedly! thank you very muvh fror reading this- i will most definitely return the favor. again, thank you...
blessed be -
Very good write. I totally identify with it! I'm trying to find that place myself yet, where I can walk away. Good work with this. I understand how you meant never in the last line, however, using "ever" would probably still get the idea across and wouldn't be so confusing as using it the way it is. "Yould run, before I would never walk" Drawing out the contractions it sounds funny. It is a mix of positive and negative. You could say "you''ld run, BUT I'd never walk" Or even You'ld run, before I'd ever walk" would get the idea across. Just a suggestion, hope it doesn't bug you. I really liked this, good writing!
~Stefani~ -
hey! thanks so much for the comment,i appreciate it so much. and the poem above: me likey muchos. i can totaly relate to that poem, ive felt like that before. sometimes its so hard to have to tear yourself away from somethat that never was and never will be... anyways good write :-)
and ps. marilyn manson rocks
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*smiles* Anytime, and thank you.
Blessed Be and Slainte ^.^
~Morgana~ -
i am enjoying your poetry- and i did mean never- see above comment- thanky you for your kind words.
blessed be -
i meant never- because i know that at this point i couldn't bring myself to walk away from him were i faced with the choice... thank you for reading
blessed be -
I lied this poem...but I wonder if you meant to say 'ever' instead of 'never at the end...for it sounds kind of confusing if you truly meant never...but besides that, I loved it very much...Continue the great writing and thank you for comenting on my poem. ^.^
~Morgana~ -
I liked this poem until the last two words, then I became confused because I am not sure what you meant by:
"you'd run before i 'd never walk." is it a typo...do you mean...
you'd run before i 'd EVER walk..or..EVEN walk ...or am I having a dense moment and am missing something obvious? Please let me know!
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