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Goodnight

When you go to sleep at night
When you lay down your head,
Do you sleep without a care,
Or lie awake in bed?

I close my eyes and float around
Through clouds of blue and green
Then find myself ten miles away
Swimming beneath a stream

The stream is dark, but I am light
I find what has been found
But when I find a tender thought
I float back to the ground

Author notes

Definitely not my best...I'm not so good at rhyming...that's why I don't rhyme stuff often.
Written January 27th, 2005

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  • riasme
    February 19, 2005
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    ARE YOU KIDDING??? I'll never be able to write like that. you're great at writing, but i stink. pouts and sulks and glares at marina

  • TheLoneMarmot
    February 1, 2005
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    i thought it was great. :-D