Devil, Devil,
Hear me pray.
Listen close
To what I say:
I would pay you to tempt me
With your every little lie
And send to me your malice
Wrapped up in a cherry pie.
Devil, Devil,
Hear me pray.
Keep my sobbing
Eyes at bay:
I would beg you to strike me
As a Devil only could.
I deserve more to suffer
Than to be just understood.
Devil, Devil,
Hear me pray.
Teach me of
The wicked way:
I would ask you to take me
Far away from who I am.
I bet there is no one here
Who would even give a damn.
Devil, Devil,
Hear me pray.
Take me, Take—
Take me away:
But if I cannot make you
Do to me what you must...
I will send me to you
With a single, well-placed thrust!
Author notes
My life sucks too much to put a price on it, I'll pay you to take it away from me instead. And if you refuse my offer, matters will be taken into my own hands.
Written January 27th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Sell Me Your Soul by DeadBeauty.
300 points, ended January 30, 2005, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Another amazing write. And I love the pic - it went perfect with the poem. Stacey:
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Delectable in its despair. ~Jim
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Wow! I like, a lot! I'm looking forward to reading the rest of your works.
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I would ask you to take me
Far away from who I am.
I bet there is no one here
Who would even give a damn.
Damn! Well said Psydeways! The last line really caught my attention :With a single, well-placed thrust!
Breathtaking. Your poetry is just WOW. You leave me speechless. Great write! -
I love the rhythm in this piece and the rhyme. Together they give it a lyrical quality and it is as if it is a chant to be put to a hard core metal tune. Very dark and creepy but very much worth the read! Best wishes... ~genielassie~
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good poem and it shows a lot of emotion great great write i hope you when the contest good luck in it...keep writeing don't ever give it up your a great writter...
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Hah chaos, there aren't many 'hope' poets on this site, now are there?
I'll try not to read into that! 
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I actually liked the gothicness to this poem, the drk and dreary side of going into the underworld to make a pact with the devil. Great rhyme scheme and a lot of thought-provoking ideas running through this. Gregg
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It's for a contest. I don't even really believe in "The Devil". Don't feel too worried, I DID write it... but I had a blast doing so.
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I would ask you to take me
Far away from who I am.
I bet there is no one here
Who would even give a damn.
GREG! please, please dont even joke about that...
...the tone in this poem is worrysome...
i care. know that i care...
love,
-kier
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First of all I really like that picture. These were my favorite lines:
I would beg you to strike me
As a Devil only could.
I deserve more to suffer
Than to be just understood.
I hope your life gets better because no one should ever REALLY want to sell their soul to the devil. -
Ahh Greg! Please tell me you aren't serious about the last paragraph
I would ask you to take me
Far away from who I am.
I bet there is no one here
Who would even give a damn.
You're wrong this time... You're wrong.
I really hope you don't think that. Uhg, you can't scare me like this!
I deserve more to suffer
Than to be just understood.
Aww Greg , no you don't! If I had a vehicle I'd drive all the way to NM and gravel for you to not feel this way about yourself. Anyway, I suppose I already 'half' know I've proven you wrong about stanza 6.
Uhg, I wish I could ward off your pain.
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wow. interesting write.
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lol, man, your gonna get the chrristian/hope poets all over your ass for this one! but yes, i aggree with roxanne, simple and elegant in its message, and well thought out. also, i , too, love that picture, really awsome, looks like its from a PC game or soemthing. anyways, yet another good one for your list. keep it up.
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powerful and angry, hoping you don't really feel this way in your authors comments. But who knows, maybe a life with the Devil might not be so bad.
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fantastic
This is my new favourite of yours. A simple idea, yet its really hard hitting, powerful and effective. You don't creep around the subject you just tell it straight. The pictures a little scary but adds to the feel of the poem. You're almost begging the devil to take your soul, this is a marvellous piece and I especially liked the rucurring 'Devil, Devil' theme. I can't fault this poem at all. Good luck in the contest.
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