Hear the raindrops
in my heart...
You can go now
Wear the tattoo of my soul
on your heart...
The whirlwind of
my mind...
banging on piano keys...
You can go now
show me, teach me,
what you don't yet know.
Ancient histories of wisdom
we have since remembered.
The tornadic pace of my being
spins
out of control.
Understand
so you can believe,
the lie,
the half-truth.
I feel your spirit
racing towards mine,
don't be afraid
it's only what it was meant
to be
from the beginning of all time,
and all things.
The volcano erupts,
our minds meet
and they melt together
as one.
Admit it,
you have searched for me,
as you had searched for her.
This is what you wanted,
from the beginning...
So it was written.
Don't let go.
hang on tightly
and enjoy our journey.
Show me what we forgot
before we ever learned it.
What have we done here,
where do we go now?
Leave us
to ourselves,
all in all,
once again,
we have...
BECOME
I will not take more from you
than i can return,
but i will take...
Your pain,
your anguish,
your heartache...
That was my
DESTINY.
Your blood now
is on my hands,
and in my heart.
I scream it out,
then cast my heart screams
with your pain,
I cast it to the four winds
and the Great Mother
hears my tortured pleas.
The four winds
and your pain's gone,
I capture it deep
within my soul.
Can't stop what's coming next,
you have my mind
and I have
your voice in my head.
Cover me now
with your blanket of sorrow,
and I shall cover you
with my peace.
*broken_chrystails*
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WOW
Amazing poem... I loved these lines...
'Wear the tattoo of my soul
on your heart...'
and this stanza spoke volumes
' feel your spirit
racing towards mine,
don't be afraid
it's only what it was meant
to be
from the beginning of all time,
and all things.'
it can be scary that feeling, I've had it before...so pwerful it's frightening!
loved this one too...
'Admit it,
you have searched for me,
as you had searched for her.
This is what you wanted,
from the beginning...'
Reminded me of something me and my partner wrote to each other in poetry once!
Well I won't quote anymore from your poem lol
Just well done and I loved the refernce to mother nature and the elements....peace
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this was a nicwe poem quite long , but it flows very nicely. this wasa really nice poem. thanks for entering
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WELL DONE
Wow this is really good. I like the way you set out the stanzas and how they flowed across the theme you used, building to the climax. Well done
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Incredible!!!
Awwww so loving and very wonderful written
.. Love it! 
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I bet they miss you there.
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Otto, actually, I did read this aloud at an open mic poetry reading and it went quiet well. I really miss that place and I think I need to get back there. Haven't been there I bet in 4 months now.
Thank you for yet another grand compliment. I am honored having had you grace my pages with your thoughts. Be Well and Be Blessed.
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KaPow! Wow this read epic cool, each verse could be the prologue to the hidden chapters beneath them. Read aloud it captures (read: rocks!) ... glad I found this!
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Wow this piece is wonderfully pennes=d as always enjoy redaing your pieces.
Gothic Angel
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keena, thanks sweetie. Thank You for such a grand compliment, I feel unworthy of it. lol I'm glad you enjoyed this and do hope you'll stop by again. Love You My Wenchly Sister.
Be Well and Be Blessed.
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INCREDIBLE
My sweet love... This is one of the best poems I have yet to read. And for you to say this is the first WOW I am amazed. I actually can not believe that this is the first piece... so well written and so full of emotion and such deep love.
This is my favorite part of the poem
i will not take more
from you...
than i can return...
but i will take...
your pain...your
anguish...your heartache...
that was my
DESTINY
I so can not wait to read more from you
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This is a profound poem as a first for this site.You put your soul out in the open for approval,with much courage.Good write.....Suseann
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good flow, format,write, poem, emotion filled and beutiful! it was great
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Man- what everyone wants to say but doesn;t know how is caught in this poem and spoken so eloquently. Simply amazing! I wouldn't change a thing. Your flow is excellent!!!!
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WOW... This is a very powerful write!!! Great job... It is a little long but it is wonderful!!! It kept my attention and I was hooked from the beginning!!!
Beth -
this is a profound and beautiful write, Heaven. I am impressed with your ability to flow from one idea to the next, coherently bringing the reader on a ride through your mind. Beautiful. peace-
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Max, yes I did change it indeed. You were right, it did deserve a better ending. I'm glad you'll give this link to Loreli, she might enjoy it also. Wonder though why you called me a trickster. lol Be Well and Be Blessed My Friend.
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My Dearest Friend Azure, yes this is the first one I believe that I posted here at AP. I thank you graciously for the compliment and applause. Taking away peoples pain when I can is a great thing, I hate to see anyone hurting, although, it can be a joy as well as a curse sometimes. PlayfulPassion and I have had discussions on this before. Soul Mates are great but, we don't always get it right. Sometimes, it takes lifetimes to do that. This time around, me and this love didn't get it right so, we are bound again to repeat it. My daughter is also another one of my soul mates. Thanks for stopping by, it's always a pleasure to have you here. Be Well and Be Blessed precious soul.
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wow...This is the first one you posted? It's very good! I am moved by the idea of being able to take away someones pain...and I love the idea of soulmates! Wonderful poem!
Lorena -
This is beautiful. I love the format and the flow. Not too mention the content
. Great write.
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Look again anytime. I finished it in light as soon as I replied to you. Thank You again My Friend for your suggestion and your hope. Be Well and Be Blessed.
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You clicked on my poem, I wondered if you would comment. Regardless, I found this, and was intrigued. As far as style is concerned, I find this very well written. Your words are aptly chosen and the flow of the verses make this piece a pleasure to read.
Content wise, powerful. Yet ending without light. The pain and the sorrow are the last impression left; there is no blinding light at the end of the tunnel. I have, in my teachings, come to learn that the last impression overshadows the body of the piece, of the life. What frequency will the energy leave behind?
Nice job. May peace be with you, and with love... M
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Hey you dont need to tell them to be gentle this is great! I love the words and style! Look forward to reading more of your work and welcome to ap!
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wow. Awesome. I loved it! Loved it so..
YOu are talented.
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