I want to ride you, with my ride
Will you bang on my snare drum?
Will you use your 5AN sticks,
With nylon tips of coure?
Will you gently pump my pedals?
And play a little fill on my toms?
Can I string you like a guitar?
Nice and tight, till you sing out notes?
Like Eee, and Aaa...
Will you softly caress my neck?
And promise not to break my G String(I HATE when that happens)?
Will you hug the curves of my body?
And play some serenading chords?
I wanna make music with you
I just hope we're not out of tune
And I hope we don't crescendo too soon
Maybe with a little, piano forte in there
Oh I want to make sweet music,
And hear your trumpets blair
Author notes
For this contest, I actually have a parrot named Sascha.
Written January 26th, 2005
A contest entry
- MUSIC-RELATED POEMS URGENTLY REQUIRED FOR LIVE SHOW... by Vera Rich.
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awww this sounds sooo dodgy, it's unreal. Just shows how much of a perv I am. I think it was meant to sound this way though, so maybe I'm not too disturbed!
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Umm, okay then. I defenitely think this poem contained a lot of metaphors. I couldn't pick out the rhyme in this one too well either. I had to read the poem or look at the rhyme,but couldn't do both at once. Nice job anyway though.
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nice musical twist, clever too in how you put this poem together. Great write and good luck in the contest.
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interesting take. very sexual and different. great job
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Well done... love the musical twist... Best of luck.
Ken
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great poem! i like how u used music. lolz. great job and thanx for entering. good luck!
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I've never had a broken G string but am thinking it must feel uncomfortable. Nice play on words here. Don't know which line I like the best. congrats on the HM and thank you for entering.
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A neatly erotic use of music as a metaphor for sex. The G-string pun is rather well-turned. I am not sure whether this would fit into the show as it stands (we are upgrading our existing script, not creating an entirely new one), but it does seem a possibility.
(We should prefer, however, for "I wanna" to be emended to "I want to..."
I shall come back to this again later. (But please, before, then, could you make it conform to the competition rule about NO NOTES OR EXPLANATIONS. -
Haha cracks me up... sorta... no really did make me laugh. kinda weird but like it ne wayz. Great write
Kristin
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