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I Want

I want to scream,
I want to bleed,
I want to feel,

To feel anything but emptiness,
To say anything but predictable,
......To drip more than tears,

You’ll never see it in my eyes,
You’ll never hear it in my voice,
......You’ll never see the scars,

I must always hide,
For fear of a worse cage,
The cage of people,
Hell on earth.

Author notes

I dunno. one of those that I"m not sure where it came from. It's not in a format that I've done before, but it helps the flow. the ...... are pauses, if you don't read it like that it doesn't work.....((and I know that its a bit short. Deal w/ it.))
Written January 26th, 2005

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  • Shade13
    February 4, 2005
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    Nice write...I liked this because it made me think and it flowed well...keep up the good writes...

    Shade


  • Open House
    February 4, 2005
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    This is good, but if the ......'s were replaced with -'s they would have the same effect. Just a little tip. Other than that, well done! I like it
    -Courtney


  • TaintedSyn
    February 4, 2005
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    Great Job!

    Hey this was really good! I got this of the shamless promotion box lol sometimes the poems really stink but heck I like this one! really great wording It expresses lots! I think you definately should be happy with this poem! go you!

    ~*PainfulLife*~


  • Darkwingsofae
    January 26, 2005
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    Yaay very nice imagery. Yes we do need to e-mail each other. I have resigned myself to a state of numbness which is find with me not worrying about other people gives me more time to worry about myself. muah e-mail me