sipping tea perched on a coffee table
deliberate movements made
just to attract the attention
of a lovely lady
blackened
thoughts wandering
maybe words should be exchanged between
us
but there is this unsure air
floating around bodies too far away from each other
to be seen as really
you and me-together
which happens to be-
my fondest wish
deepest distraction
biggest secret
most painful memory.
of you dragging your fingers
around a pastel cup dilled to the brim of steaming water
not thinking about the same things as i
i just wish-
for once.
then maybe my words won't be so t w i s t e d
in your mind
and we can finally
breathe
as one.
Author notes
i don't do this that often becuase i feel it's not usually that nessesary. the format that is. but these are thoughts, and in reading others poetry, and in experimenting a little more on my own, i've found it's quite an effective use of space. just to say.
Written January 26th, 2005
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I enjoy the manipulation of the words, it often gives the work a different feel than if it was just in normal column style. I enjoyed reading this immensely....excellent.
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i believe it is an effective use of space. i tend to lean twards poems close to this style. experimenting is always good. This reminded me of the day you gave me that muffin and that girl was sitting close to the library, and she looked like fidg...
god job
cya
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