when i'm god, everybody dies
i see it all, it is all lies
heaven's lost, hell is right here
i am the beginning, the middle, the end
cut yourself and let it bleed
nobody cares, least of all jesus
he's too worried about the nails in his hands
and the splinters of holy wood in his back
i hate them all, the popes, the priests
little choir boys raped in sleep
bibles read by all you sheep
virgins so prized, must keep them clean
i'd fuck them all and make them whores
isn't this what you were all waiting for?
when i'm god, everything is dead
it's all a dream inside your head
creation's gone, my work is done
i created the man, then i gave him the gun
Author notes
i'm the devil
Written January 25th, 2005
A contest entry
- Bible Bashing. Oh Come all ye Faithful. by ----michael----.
400 points, ended April 15, 2005, 25 entries
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wow -- lol... talk about bible bashing.. HAHAHA... i hope you won that contest. lol... this was very well written. very dark... angry....anti-god.... kind of sad. but then i have no religion... so it doesnt matter.... well written. totally psychotic sounding. keep up the good work.
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i love you- wow- your insight amazes me- thank you for taking the time to read it- please read some of my others- i will read your works as well.
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Unique
Most religous people these days spend all of their time judging others. No one knows you and where your comming from. I happen to be christian, and though it isn't exactly my kind of poem, it's one of the best in here. Keep up the good wrighting. Oh, and don't worry, I only pray for those who want it, doesn't it seem kind of pointless otherwise? -
Nice poem, quite creative. And there is no devil, only man...
peace
doug
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I think you do it through help but no need for 70, I had none at the start! Have been given 650 by 2 people! anything will be fine!
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well thank you, also- how would i go about donating points to the contest? i'd like to be generous with 70... maybe i'll get them back. anyways, please help me give them away.
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nice one, after such anger the ending had to deliver, and it did. thanks for entering my contest. A very venom filled write!
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dude this is sweet stuff!! WOW seriously im bookmarking this!! holy shit!! no pun intended
good luck and thanks for entering
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i'm not sure what category it was for- possibly weird, possibly political- all the gun laws that are so lax, thak you for reading- i wish i'd placed in your contest
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hah that is really well done, i stand with you on a lot of this stuff, which category is it supposed to be in? weird? get back to me please. good luck in my contest
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well, thank you for your modesty and praise- i'm glad you enjoyed it so much- believe me, i enjoyed yours a lot as well
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wow...this totally blew me away...i agree with you completely...you blew mine out of the water....thank you for commenting on my poem and authors page....once again, this write is truly a great write, thank you for posting it...toodles
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that was bloody good!! i liked it very much!! well done and good luck. thankyou for entering
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i'm pagan, so many of your kind words are lost on me- but i do thank you for them... i don't agree entirely with you that most christians do as the bible says, but i belive you when you say you're failthful. thank you for being honest about not liking the words- most people try to soften it all so much that they don't say what they really think- i am going to read your work when i have more time to appreciate it. thank you
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This poem has a lot of controvercy for me as a christian. Thought I don't like what you've said here you did say it well and, even thought it saddens me to say, I understand wherre you are coming from; A lot of people are hypocrites, preaching one thing and doing another. I do hope you realize most are not this way. Most christians (myself included) do as the bible sayes to do and do not say to do what they would not.
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wow! so full of hate... interesting write. keep doing what u do best...... poetry
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oh, no... not at all- i'm sorry for making it seem like i thought it was your fault or anything- just saddening circumstance- i like your name, i really do- the memories are the only thing that hurt... thank you for your comment- bye
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nice write...kinda remeinded me of a perfect circle...thnx for the comment on my poem...and sorry if my name hurts you...i really am...
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ahh... yes, i was right... you did understand it. i quite appreciate the idea of people reading this and being shocked, but it's ever so much more rewarding when they read it and comprehend.
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Outstanding
I really liked this! A dark and insightful rant that made stinging commentaries about some of the hypocritical social idealologies that exisist in our society. Well done!!! -
Wow its so deep and full of hate. Its sad though that you would go to the extent of that. good work.
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thank you for commenting- it means a lot... actually i am pagan, i don't like or disliek the christian idea of god, i believe in many gods... i simply loathe the way that pseudo-christians use their bible-thumping to cloak such selfish and evil acts.
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Yes, now it makes a bit more sense to me... I would never tell someone to quit writing... ideas and the expression of them is what we are all about. Write on, and write loud, and write till the pain goes away...
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your poem was amazing. i first thought the title said when i was good, so it drew me in, and i was gonna click the back button because i didnt really wanna read n e thing about god, but you drew me in, i just cuoldnt stop! i liked everything about your poem, but i laughed when you said the thing about the virgins. you strike me as someone who doesnt like god, but hey, whatever floats your boat. n e way, you have a good point and i think your talented! keep writing!
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thank you for asking me to still write... i know this is rather shocking for many... please read the comment i made to another's comment above.
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um... basically this poem was about what the world is coming to... i have no desire for any power over others- i don't believe in it, i simply put myself in the place of someone who might.
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Hmmmmm...issues? I have a bit of trouble with the message (cause though not a traditionalist I am still Christian and I felt a bit uncomfortable with the jesus part of the poem) but I have to admit the idea behind the poem is intriguing. Makes me wonder.... why? The everlasting, never ending question. When we question our existence it can never be a bad thing. Write on, poet.
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I don't know what to say. I'm kinda shocked. I don't want to argue with your beliefs, but this totally differs from mine. I was just generally shocked by everything you said here. I guess if that's what you're aiming for then you did a pretty good job of shocking me.
Keep writing
Kannika
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