The seconds tick by,
As the hour winds down.
Time flies past,
The grains flow through.
The hourglass hits the floor,
You wind the clock back for more,
'Cause you know, you know?
Death's doorstep has a welcome mat,
That's all he needs to say.
Cliff, Dave and Kurt are waiting out back,
But you gotta get past the house first.
Leave behind your girl,
Your family, friends and dreams.
They're with ambition at the door,
And they aren't coming in.
But feel free to bring your bass,
We'll hang it in the hall.
There's a spot we need to fill,
And you've had your curtain call.
You can rest in the bedroom,
And smile alone at the mirror.
But your blackened heart stands still...
Tick Tick Tick Tock
Tick Tick Tick Tock
Tick Tock
Tick Tock
Tick Tick Tick...
Author notes
Yeah. Don't ask. Don't know. Muse inspired. Very odd.
Written January 24th, 2005
What did you think
Comments
1 - 14 of 14
-
And to think I thought I could get away with just applauding. Damn you! 'Least I'm the first of the Trio to actually comment here, so I should be proud.
This poem amuses me in that kind of morbid way, honestly, and we know I'm not usually morbidly amused. o.O' Good write. Keep it up. Give us more stories too. o.o -
Well, I got a bit of inspiration from Metallica, but that's the only thing I can think of. Thanks for the comment.
-
I wasn't really thinking about love, more time and death. But.. I can see a love element to it. Interesting look... Thnaks for the comment. I appreciate it.
-
Leave behind your girl,
Your family, friends and dreams.
They're with ambition at the door,
And they aren't coming in.
Very cool. Rock and roll legends I would think (Cliff Burton, Kurt Cobain, but Dave...? Can't think of a last name
What about Stevie Ray? Anyhoo...I liked this.
-
this is how death needs to be looks at. like the time is all we have. you know? i really think your point is good
-
Hmmm, interesting, I like this. This certainly is original, Part of your poem sounds familiar though, but I cant really place it, Oh well, Kool poem. Keep it up.
-AZ- -
hey great write time can be a great pain when we are in a hurry it seems to speed up but when we are waiting it seems like a minute will be 4 but i know this poem is about love or at least i think it is but hey im not toatlally sure but great write
-
Wow really cool poem i dont think that i have every read anything like this before! its really good...kind of hard to follow...but that just helps with the whole picture and meaning of the poem! Really great job! keep it up!
~me -
Damn, what a cool poem. There were some parts that could have used re-writing, such as "time flies by like grains of sand" and "Leave behind your girl,/Your family, friends and dreams."
These seem a little cliched to me. but it really was a cool poem. -
Thanks for the comment and the applause. This was a totally random thing.
Where's your quote from? Corpus Bones? Sounds familier... -
death's door has a welcome mat, that's all he needs to say...what a great verse. I really liked this poem...keep up the good work!
-
this was awesome! It reminds me a little of a book I read about Time and Sand. Don't ask...Anywho, great job! I thought it was really good. It was very different! I was pretty surprised how much it tied in with the book which is kinda ironic.
"The seconds tick by,
As the hour winds down.
Time flies past,
Like the grains of sand"
.....that's just awesome! Keep it up!
LostDom -
Woah. Quick reponse.
Cheers, Thanks for the applause. Glad you liked it. -
I like it.
"Leave behind your girl,
Your family, friends and dreams.
They're with ambition at the door"
I loved this line..... good stuff
Adding your comment:
1 - 14 of 14
4 old applause
