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a dance, my dear?

We dance the dance
With blades in our stolen hearts
And treason in our torn veins.
Blinded by shame upon others,
We are too caught up fighting battles
For everyone else, but ourselves.

~

Author notes

unfinished ramblings which i found in my little green book...

i'll finish it later.  Maybe.

For this reason, i discourage critique.  Thanks anyway folks.
Written January 23rd, 2005

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  • marsinlovee
    September 17, 2005
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    Very nicely written , i loved the first line, very nicely flowd into the second-
    hm i dont agree with Tk i think its fine the way it is and doesnt need much more added on---
    anyway
    keep pen to paper and write luck at the top
    lotsa love from marsiepan


  • theprodigalsister
    January 24, 2005
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    Fabulous lines in this piece... "With blades in our stolen hearts"

  • Pater Sin
    January 24, 2005
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    Nice rice.


  • -Charlotte-
    January 23, 2005
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    I like how it is, even though it seems to me that you think its not finished. But, nice work anyway! LOLz.
    ~*Tk*~
    Edited on Jan 23, 8:05 p.m. because ''.