You desire a love of silence
I desire a love of violence
We laugh together with delicious symphony
At each other's lack of sympathy
You desire a room with a view
I desire a room for two
A room for two or a room for one
It's obvious here which one has won
Some people have a view to see
Whatever they can get for free
I have a desire for a love to last
May it come slow or may it come fast
I hate the way you always seem
To want a girl from a dream
Why don't you want me?
I'm the only one you can see
You desire a love of silence
I desire a love of violence
Why can't we both desire
A love with an everlasting fire?
Author notes
Written in 2000.
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A contest entry
- Anything. by Lj-.
300 points, ended May 15, 2006, 120 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great comparisons on this one. I like the easy flow to it. It lulls you into a sense of peace and acceptance. Great job on this
Blessings, Gypsy
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Wow, that was very excellently put. Someone is always chasing someone who is never chasing them.
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this was a good poem but mostly i wanted to give points for the contest
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Wow this is wonderful hun. Something that I'm sure many people have felt. You did a wonderful job
Petal
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well i can sure as shit see why you won this contest
because you suck. no no just kidding it popped in to my mind that it would be humorus to type but 9dollars and 34 cents says you are not laughing. i do like this tho, i like how i was looking for a poem i could realate to but didn't find it in this one, instead i found beautiful gut wrenching feelings ( hope you understand that)
love it live it
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desirable
This poem seemed too simple but it definitely tells something I desire... I like it! -
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Awesome, just awesome. I loved this. "I desire a love of violence". I can relate to every line. Thank you for this entry. -N -
Great write! The rhyme scheme was very refreshing, as was the message embedded within the words! Keep it up!
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Very nice with good rhythm and cadence ... if I were to be critical it would be of the ending .... too many syllables ... lose the 'everlasting' - don't worry, 'fire' all by itself, is powerful imagery ... JMHO --- great write! :0) chris
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Interesting commentary on differences in a relationship. Nicely stated.
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great write! keep posting more, i'll keep reading!
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Strong, and loud feelings speaking in this piece. It's very deep. Great job! =D
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I like it, lots of emotions and kinda that feeling JUST LOVE ME PLEASE :(
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loved it great write
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