I'm walking down the main street of boredom
All alone
The rain washes away everything known to me
Like the river of dreams
The river of dreams swept away everything known to me
Objects moving around me: what are they?
Past thoughts, memories?
I don't know
All I know is that they're over there and I'm over here
They have each other
I have nothing
All I am is lost
Lost in the rain
In a list
A contest entry
- 5 Dark Sad Angst Poem Choices by LonelyTears07.
300 points, ended November 3, 2004, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Imagery
You maintain
A great atmosphere unrestrained
With a word of ‘rain’
You maintained a good emotional of rain
With thoughts in this poem
So simple and yet profound quite new
To the poems I have read, quite definitely true
Rain poured down like a glimpse of pitter patter
Like drenched with a dip of water
I feel the conveying of your brain
Of how you brain works like a chain
Clinging onwards like a field of grapes
To in being a grateful order of free words
Your mind of letting the words spread on by
For the fact, that no one will cry
Yet something to feel, without no desire
Seeing this poem, I am grateful to come by
To nothing to say, but see you later or goodbye?
Flying more off to another to see
Of someone’s featured poems,
They might want me to see
Plea me to see what they are after
Pleading for a comment after.
By Reisha, Raiku and Shattered Image
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Wow... this is beautiful, personal and well written... Here I felt all your solitude mingled with pride yet waying on your happiness.;; beautiful. especial the theyre there and I'm here line. It's really explicit and revelant.
Beautiful piece! Don't lose hope.
L.aO.
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Actually, it's neither. I wrote that poem in my head while I was walking home from school in the rain about 7 years ago. I really did feel what was written. Thank you for your comment.
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That might not be exactly bad, just kidding! I know that feeling! This is so beautifully written! It's so short and yet brilliant! It's so sad and yet peaceful! It's just amazing! This poem's wordings flow and the vocabulary isn't too big! You did a terrific job! Keep up the great work! I'll be reading more of your work!
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Sounds like a dream. Or a nightmare? I like poems that just say what they want to say and no more! The sound like thought in your mind. Nice Work.
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all is good
How impressive is this? Very good work, I must say. I have a soft spot for free verse. Glad that I stopped by to read this.
SirPort
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Rain is so beautiful..I thought this poem was really good. Keep it up!
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I wouldn't mind being lost in the rain, for sometimes it is the rain that purifies all that is going on and it brings you to a spot where you feel better and find the will to carry on... has nothing to do with your thing but hey... just my thoughts lol
Petal
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I like the concept of being lost in the rain. Rain is jst so profound, it haas alot of meaning behind it. Great job and goodluck in my contest!!!
*Mary*
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