Don't
Don't tell me that you understand
Don't tell me what you know
Don't tell me that I will survive
How I will surely grow.
Don't tell me this is just a test
That I am surely blessed
That I am chosen for this task
Apart from all the rest.
Don't come at me with answers
That can only come from me
Don't tell me how my grief will pass
That I will soon be free.
Don't stand in pious judgement
Of the bonds I must untie
Don't tell me how to suffer
And don't tell me how to cry.
My life is filled with selfishness
My pain for all to see
But I need you... I need your love
Unconditionally.
Accept me in my ups and downs
I need someone to share
Just hold my hand and let me cry
And say, " My friend, I care "
© Dreamweaver
September. 2002
Author notes
Written September 11th, 2002
A contest entry
- September 11th by Feline2001.
400 points, ended September 14, 2004, 33 entries
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Poignant Write!
I clicked on return the favour when I read your comments to my contest poem Sammy and this came up. It's a very poignant poem. The words you have chosen reach to the very core of your reader's heart showing the depth of your emotions. Life happens to us all in one way or another, we work through the emotional side of things the best way we can, it's no wonder we sometimes question the why's and wherefore's. The graphic you have used says so much, they say a picture paints a thousand words, this added to what you have penned here makes a most excellent read.
As always, you have done justice to your poem, just proving what a wonderful talent you have, thank you for sharing this with us.
Always
~Katie~
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An emotionally charged write that caused goose bumps to rise all over me. This was a splendid piece full of pure, raw emotion. I loved it and wish you luck in the contest and peace in life.
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WOOPS! i ddint mean to cry.. i meant to make a happy face.. like this one
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WOW... im left speechless as well.. im gonna bookmark this one considering i have no idea how to add a poem to your favorites
Well.. best of luck in the contest. i'm sure you'll be placed in the first 6. you sure do deserve it considering poems that people can relate to are one of the best poems are there.
Nevertheless.. great touching poem.
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Very beautiful and touching.Well written.
MoonWillow -
excellent
Very much agreed. You have said what we all feel and cannot put into words, and for that I commend you. Well written. -
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I CARE!!!! I thought this was one of your best Sam. Loved it. Makes you stop and think and feel.
HUGSSSSSSS LOuise -
Thank you Zero ... I appreciate your visit and comment
Sammy -
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Very moving words which apply to all situations, ah if only we all
did care more - none of us would ever say again 'who could care less!'
My fav' line was of course the opening one;
'Don't tell me that you understand... '
don't you hate it when people say that, out of pure reflex,
when they have no idea, and don't really want to know...
As always, great words Sammy. -
Thank you ever so much Berys ...
Hugs
Sammy -
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ah yes Sammy just thank you for putting into words what so many feel but can't express.
Hugs
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Thank you so much Connie
Sammy -
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Sammy.... very moving....
well done -
Thank you so much for coming by Mike and leaving such a kind comment.
Long time no see. I hope all is well with you.
Thanks again
Sammy -
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speachless here sammy... incredible, incredible poem...
mike -
Thank you so much dear Pat for tour kind and encouraging words.
(((HUGS)))
Sammy -
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But for the grace of God go I...
Thank you for your kind words, your understanding thoughts... And thank you for being a friend...
(((HUGS)))
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Thank you so much abusedlittlegurl11 and Amanda for your very kind words
Sammy -
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This has to be one of the most awesome poems I have ever read! Great Job!
Amanda -
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wow its amazing thanks for writeing it -
Thank you all so much. So many to thank individually, but I honestly appreciate everyone taking the time to read and comment.
Thank you again
Sammy -
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But it will be okay... you will grow... things will get better... You don't have to believe me, I know I'm arrogant, but I know I'm right... If you don't believe people can help you; if you don't believe you can help yourself, then you truly are lost... You will never forget; nobody will forget, but you already have survived, you already have grown... We all have grown...
Scott
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very moving!!! *claps hands and tears* -
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It has been along time since words have moved me as much as yours have. I appluad you. -
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Wonderfully spoken ...and I totally agree.. allow the sorrow in each of us to run it's course, it leads to healing, whatever the reason...9/11 or any other sadness that befalls us.
I don't understand cdcoopers response ...did he misinterpret this piece??
It's beautiful, Sammy.
Thanks for putting into words what so many of us feel, it helps us to understand anothers pain and the need to grieve, the need for us to accept each others grief and be there for them ...unconditionally.
{{{HUGS}}}
Dee -
excellent
beautiful...just beautiful -
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very touching & SOOOO true -
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Incredible, and I read it today on 9/11..so touching and perfect...thank you for putting it so well...the world needs more sentiment like this and perhaps we can avoid such things at another 9/11 Bright Blessings, Romhain -
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Wonderfully spoken Sammy....I aplaud you.....your words always know how to hit the right spot.
It's good to show that we care.
Ann -
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This was a simply stunning tribute...Great job!! -
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good job dream, any words written about that awful day, help someone in some way. freedom to express is what were fighting about after all.
Lisa -
cdcooper. Obviously you are ignorant of more things than just poetry. You must live a very lonely life with your sad attitude towards it. You are no doubt the type who would tell Picaso how to paint!
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This is such a touching write. The words, the expression and even the beat were perfect. As for the comment that a certain individual made...ahem...cd-something or another. He/she is obviously heartless or in deniel....poor sad soul. Once again I will say...this is awesome. ~*Amy*~ -
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I applaud you Sammy...this was a most brilliant write!!!!! -
Thank you all for coming by and leaving your kind comments
They are very much appreciated
Sammy -
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My friend I truly do care, with a heart that aches. A very sad time that will haunt us all. -
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*takes your hand* I do care... -
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Who the hell is cdcooper?I mean does he even have a heart at all?This was awesome,and anyone who says different should burn in hell.Good write
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Wow, this was awesome. I had the radio on and the words fit perfectly into the tune of it (dont know what song) I was singing this one out loud. Moving, thank you. -
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Dream the three dots at the end of each line? Give me a break. mela-drama without an orginal point. don't tell me how mad, how sad, or how lost you are show me. Poetry is about showing and not telling. I say bad Job -
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*sniffling* You always know how to say the things that are locked deep inside others. Again, wonderful job. -
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9/11 effected people in totally different way, I would never be so arrogant as to say 'it will be ok' -
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Amen -
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Not just for those directly affected by that awful day... this is the way we all need to be treated! Well said, Sammy!
Thanks!
Maureen x -
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yep... this is fantastic. great point. -
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word! 100% aggreement. -
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A moving tribute.
Gem xxx
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