You’ve not been there for me, never have, never will.
Never bothered with me, even so I love you still.
Not once in my life have you done the right thing.
You could have written me a letter or given me a ring.
When I’ve needed you there, and been feeling really bad.
You’ve never come to cheer me up, never tried to be my dad.
I was sexually abused twice and you weren’t there
When I was bullied at school dad, you didn’t care
Now Im 15 and in my life there’s no dad
My mum and Nan are all ive ever had
But even my mum doesn’t care; she’s so much like you
My Nan is the only one that’s tried to get me through
But now Im losing her, pushing her away
Because inside, I still hope, that you’ll love me some day.
A tiny bit of me, just wants you to return
But you don’t love me, never have, ive got to learn
It’s tearing me inside dad, I don’t know what for
I can even remember the last time I say you, anymore.
I think you were ill dad, I think you were blind
Alcohol is killing you, and you don’t seem to mind
But I can’t come to your funeral, Im not allowed
Id sit in the middle, just mingle with the crowd
But I wont be there dad, my mum wont let me go.
Im you’re daughter but she wants noone to know
You know where I live and you’re out there somewhere.
So please come back dad, I need to know you care.
Author notes
MY HEADS GOING TO EXPLODE!
Written January 23rd, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- PAY IT FORWARD....again by Thedragonisgone.
300 points, ended October 30, 2006, 59 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Best Prewrite by Heavenly Angel.
450 points, ended December 8, 2007, 38 entries
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Geez sis... I'm speechless... this made me cry...
It's perfect as it is.. don't change it!
Love you lots!!!!!
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With pen to paper you have you have expressed some very difficult emotions and thoughts here. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
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Touching
This reminds me so much of my children's "father"
I don't understand men (or women for that matter) who have a child and not want to be part of their lives (shakes head)
THEIR loss; not yours
Thank you for sharing and for being a part of this contest!
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This poem is very effective. The unconditional love that a girl has for her father is expressed well. A very emotional write. Well done dear poet.
Good luck in the contest.
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This one has such a sad grip. I'm amazed at how many fathers out there somewhere just aren't what they are called to be. Sigh. My only comments would be that you have contractions all over the place but very few apostrophes to go with them. Thanks for entering.
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hey this is good, and full emotion
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This was really great. Keep it up!
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Another powerful piece. It's going to be so hard judging this contest!! This is very very good. I loved the rhyming scheme you've got, the couplets are great.
You know where I live and you're out there somewhere.
So please come back dad, I need to know you care.
I can really relate to this, he doesn't know where I am at the mo, but when I'm in my grandmother's he's right across the road and he just doesn't care.
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fab poem very powerful and emotional well done and gd luck in the contest
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This is really powerful, and a very painful subject. My best friend went through the same thing, and I knew it tore her up and I couldn't do anything to help. Just don't let something like that control your life, he is your Dad, but that doesn't ever mean he's allowed to hurt you and be excused. Anyways, best of luck with all that, I hope you find peace with him. Great write, thanks for entering.
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Please reply by telling me this isnt true! I don't know how I could live without my dad!
Please, please reply! It's a superb write! really got to my heart.... Keep it up, and the rhyming is great too!
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Wow. you had me in tears with this poem... im sorry that your dad never was there for you. i don't know how you feel, bc my father is always there for me when i need him. But really good job.
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wow...very sad...my parents were divorced but neither of them ever left me...if this has happened to you i show you my greatest sympathy...i love my parents and grandparents...they are always there for me. good job and keep up teh good work
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great
this is so sad, but i love it.. i cant even imagine wot you are going through, but you are so brave to be able to talk about it.. i always find poetry an easier way to show how i feel inside and your poem is very powerful and amazing xxxxxx -
This is soooooooooooooooooooooooooo sad, but in a good way. it seriously mad me cry WWWAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!! this is very powerful and i love it.
but i just wanted to say that you wrote
I can even remember the last time I say you, anymore.
and i think you meant
I can't enen remember the last time I saw you, anymore
not sure ijust think
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Great indeed, quite expressive. I loved reading it and relating myself to it. - Adarsh71
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OOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGG!!!!!!!!!!!!!tell me this is not tru tell me this is no tru! is ur dad that horrible? at least he died and u cared ( is that what happened? )i can't beleive this, all i can say is good luck!
Note: I changed my name to Alice In Wonderland, for your info
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great poem
that was a really good poem. it was very deep. i had just entered two of my poems and then i read this because it looked good, and i ws right. i really hope you win. this is really great and i think ill read some of your other poems because i can tell your a good poet. keep up the good word. good luck
Becky Ann
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hey. i can really relate to this except for that fact that it's my mom that's gone and not my dad. but everything else seems like you wrote it just for me. people shouldn't have to go through with losing people like that. espcailly if they're there but not,(that made no sense but i hope you know what i mean.) i'm sorry that you lost your dad. this poem is really heartfelt. Great write and thanx for entering the contest. GB and GGHL. ~~~Bec~~~
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aww,this is so sad and so beautifully written ,great job...keep up the good work...luvmybabys...
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This is so powerful !!!! Its so strong and effective ! Its very well written and seems really heartfelt ! i really enjoyed reading it even though its such a sad piece
!! Seems like there is alot of emotion in the piece and its so sad !! Great Write , Sad stort ! Thanx 4 sharing !
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this is really freakin awsome so powerful so full of heartache. I can practically feel the pain myself. Very well written, it has a great form and again a wonderful rhyme scheme. you are a very talented writter I am going to add you to my favorites as well I really like your work. I can tell you pour your heart into each write.
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Very good
Hey..I really loved this poem..It had so much meaning to me too..because when i was 7 my dad left..and i haven't seen him since..and i know wuts it like to wish he was there..to help..and i can't remember what he looks like..besides the couple pictures i have..and like i don't remember the sound of his voice..it sucks..but i guess we just gota keep beleieving they will come back..or be there for us one day!..i duno..def Great Poem..nice Job!..Chessy~ -
i can totally relate to this
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15 of 10 stars
Man, this is really sad! really it is. I wish you luck...I'm in the opposite situation, my dad is always around and I hate him. -
blah, blah... woe is me... where's the poem?
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That was extremly emotional. And I know exactly how you feel. Even when I wanted him there my father was never around, and no matter how hard I tried, I don't think he ever loved me or cared. So I can get a definitely relate to this.
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it obvious to see the pain behind this poem, it is so amazing, i can relate to this aswell, i hate my dad, well u have so much talnet, keep writing...form emma XxX aka thechosen1 -
That was a really good poem,I'm just sorry that you had to write it, (if you know what I mean), that those things hadn't happened to you, I'm so sorry that you went through all that, and I hope you get what you wish for
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Wow...
Now that is very very very very very depressing. I don't really know what else to say with that...
"I can even remember" I think you meant "I can't" (because of the "anymore" at the end of the line)
Anyways, I'm taking it that your father wasn't a very good role model or even a good, caring person. It sounds terrible that people will just not care about one another's hardships. The fact that his funeral is a taboo for you seems a litle harsh on your mother's judgement, but then, she is your mother. It just sounds far too dreary and sad to actually do a full length critique on this...I'm all ready pouting, and I know a good sympathetic cry will help out on that, but wow..... -
extemely good
This is such a sad and emotional poem. Its soooo good. I really hope things get better for you in the future, this is such a deep poem, i love it.
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Very emotional.I really can relate, my father isn't in my life, he left at a very young age.
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wow, thats amazing, its so deep and real its like its alive
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THis is really sad, yet it is really good! Thanks for entering my contest! Please Im me and say what topic this is on.
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Whoa. That's...well...depressing as all hell. It's well written, though. Great poets must go through great pains, apparently. I wish you a lot of peace for the future.
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that was so good. Th eemoton is really good. i cant believe what you've gone through and your're only 15. The rhyming was good. I hope time will heal your pain. -
Aww really deep, and really emotional.. I really hope that someday it'll get better for you, I really hope so. I agree on what LadyUnique('s psychiatrist) said, and I hope it can help you.
The rhyming in this poem was very nice, and well.. the whole poem just got me, you did very well on this write! -
it's obvious you're in a lot of pain as you wrote this. sometimes, when we're so close to the pain, a poem can be more of a vent than poetry. that can work too
i noticed that you were able to write very clearly and hold a good rhyme throughout this poem despite your pain.
it's very sad what harm parents, with too many personal problems of their own, can inflict upon their children. a wise psychiatrist once told me "the way your parents treat you doesn't mean they don't love you, it means they are not giving you the kind of love you need". i've kept this in my head forever and it helps some.
your grandmother is there for you. maybe you're pushing her away because you think she'll leave you too?? so if you push her first it won't hurt as much?? the mind uses what it knows to try and protect itself.
i really do wish you the best. keep writing for it will help you. sometimes a little, other times a lot.
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Hey, I entered your contest and I read that I should come and read this and I am glad I did. Its awesome, very powerful. Good flow and feeling with this one.
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i love this. this is so good omg. my favorite line was:
Alcohol is killing you, and you don’t seem to mind.
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It's sad the way your dad has never cared about you, i hope beyond hope that we will come back one day and you can tell him all about you! Maybe one day you will be happy together, until then don't give up hope and keep thinking about him no matter what happens!
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Very emotional and a desparate cry for help. I wish you knew his address. You could send it to him to see if it gets through. I'm glad for you that you have the hope of someday meeting your father. My children can never have that hope because their father died. Hold fast to hope and hang on to Nan. You need support.
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Nice poem. I can see your pain and it also has a good rhythm.
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very very very deep & emotional. this piece takes alot of talent to write!
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emotional write
This is a very emotional write. I always tell people that little girls belong to dad no matter how horrible of a person or dad they may be. Maybe one day, he'll come to you and give you the great big hug that you deserve, If he doesn't you always have life experience that shows you what kind of parent not to be. May your pen never go dry~ Cuddles -
This is really very heartfelt and it hits close to home with me. My father went to jail when I was 3 and when he got out, he acted as if I didn't exist. He's never been there. I'm so sorry you were abused; I've been there too. Just do yourself a favor and don't give up hope. Keep writing to let the feelings out, and keep fighting your way through life until you can find your happiness. Never give up the fight- you deserve better than that. Keep up the great writes! You're awesome.
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this poem is AMAZING! it's so strong and has such wonderful emotions. i'm so sorry that you've had to go through all of this and i hope things look up for you very soon! in the meantime keep writing these incredible poems.
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I'm soory love... I know what it's like to not have a dad that cares... my dad chose his girlfriend over me... he'd rather be with her than be with me... I had to move out and go live with my mum because my dad's girlfriend would do horrible shit to me... she read my diary once before everyone... my friends, family members... it was horrible... I'm really good at art stuff like drawing and painting... and people tell me I can sing... and I'm good at acting...but then my dad's girlfriend convinced my dad that I haven't any talent and to never go to any of my school plays I wrote, and never go to a concert of mine if I get into a band, and to never buy any of my art work if I get famous because it's a waste of money to buy something that's shitty... but them my ma told me that I have alot of talent and so havent my gf and all my friends... so I guess I'll just have to forget about my dad because I guess it's him I lack love from, and I guess it was meant to be that way... Brill write though...
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Very good!
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wow! that was so powerful! I felt your eomotion and the pain that you must have. this touched me hard. well done on this great write
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Wow such an emotional rush...wow.
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this cuts deep- i'm so sorry you feel this way about your dad and i hope things will get better for you... this was a great poem i liked the flow.
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Heartwreching And Honest
This poem really touched my soul --- I could,as much as possible,feel the pain and anguish that you experienced as you put these emotions onto paper...I admire your bravery for doing so as well as your creativity
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Something I could relate to in certain ways..
Quite a deep poem. Good imagery, flows well, well written. So sad…no one should have something like a parent missing from their life. You shouldn’t have to feel like there’s a big hole…you love him anyways. I can tell that there was much effort put into this poem, and to some sense I could relate. I’ve gone through abuse both physical, and mental. Don’t forget that you are not alone in your problems…I can’t quite explain what this poem makes me feel entirely…a loss for words…. If you ever need someone to talk about things like this or anything else…I’m here. Good job, and keep up the great work!! ~Stephanie~ aka ~Brown eyes~
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it is like my birth dad (im adoptied) and i just so glad i dont feel the same way
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This is really good angel. The rhyming was brilliant and the flow was just as good. This is personal? I'm sorry you have to go through this. Great write. We're all here for you.
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this is so deep. i feel for you. im sorry you had to go through this, life sux, luv jess
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Hey...This is so emotional! I had tears in my eyes!! Ive been in the kinda same situation and I know how much it hurts and how badly you need someone who loves you to keep you sane!! Unfortunatly I was alone aswell, Ive kept most of my secrets inside because of the shame I felt. It's good you can let all these emotions out..I wrote a poem about my experiences and I got a gold trophy so thats how much people actually do care!! If you ever need anyone to talk to about it i'm here and yeah lol
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Great but scary
Hey whats up, I read your poem Dad(longer), Its very good, and bad at the same time, I think you know what I mean. I dont know what to say really...I'm alittle choked up...tell me, is this about you, or someone else? Write me back please. As far as how you wrote it and everything its great...but as far as the events that took place in it are very scary. Hey, if you need someone else to talk to, i'd like for us to become friends...hope to here from you soon.
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REALLY GOOD!!!!!!!!
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WOW, that was amazing! the ryming was great and the flow was too! nice job. the ryhmes didn't seem to be forced in anywhere and it's hard to make a ryhming poem like that. this is an amazing piece, im going to bokmark this. i wish i could send this to my dad. and he would know how i feel. i can relate alot. i don't know my dad, i've seen him twice my whole life and still just call him by his name, not dad. and in the same way, i do know he didn't care for me. i moved closer to him, about 45 mins away for six years and went to visit him and not once in six years did he call me to hear my voice or send a letter or even ask my mom how i was. it's sad enough when you don't have a dad, but it's worse when they are so close yes distant. i love this poem alot. im happy i put up that post, because i wouldn't have read this piece. nice work again!!!! i can't belive how much i like this piece. amazing! all i have to say is that you deserve MANY applauds for this....great work.....again. thanks for sharing and i may read some of your other work. and im sorry that you have to go through this pain too. it's sad, but you can get through it. i hope you feel better, because i know too how it feels. if you ever want to talk im me or e-mail me rocker_chic_8@hotmail.com anyways, yeah...wow.....great work...
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i don't have this problem. although i love your poem and i think it is deep and ful of emotion, my dad has always been there for me. it seems srtange to me, reading a poem like this where a father doesn't seem to care or love his child at all. one of my friends has a dad who abused her and keeps running off. i think about this alot and how my friend must feel about her life, just trying to love her father even though he can never be there for her. overall, great poem.
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Your poem was very deep, but very, very very, good.My dad isnt there for me either, so i know where u are coming from.Great Poem!!
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aww....i could totally feel all your emotion in this poem...you did a great job. And just like all your other poems....great job!
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Great Job
Excellent job. You caught emotions wonderfully and it was incredibly heartfelt. I'm sorry about your father...I hope things get better for you! I'm in a similar predicament...the last time I saw my biological father was when I was three and a half, and I didn't even know who I was talking to. He was 'one of mommy's friends'...I do have an adoptive dad but that's it and I've always wanted to formally meet my bio. father. Keep writing.
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thanks 4 all da nice comments , i really like this background lol, i think it makes the blue look further away then the red lol! but that mite just be me being strange lol
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A beautiful write... You really put a lot of emotion into this one... Your rhyming flows nicely and is not forced at all... I am sorry that this happened to you... Keep up the great work!!!! and NEVER stop writing!!!! Oh yeah, and Good Luck in the contest!!!!
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This poem is amazingly awesome!! It is so well thought out and said! You really got to the point! The rhyming was soooo great in this poem! The rhyming fit so so so well! I loove this poem! When I read it out loud, the words just rolled off my tongue, it flowed so nicely! Awesome write! Keep it up!!!
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this is a very powerful poem, full of emotion, and well written, well done, rach x
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wow this is very good but so sad, it's so full of emotion. i can relate to this my dad left my mom when i was 6 weeks old so i haven't ever had any kind of relationship with him, when ever i was about 7 he tried to have a relationship with me but after a year he quit calling and now i don't ever hear from him, i'm about to be 16 and i have seen him twice in my life, i guess he wasn't ment to be my dad, and i feel just like you i love him even though he hasn't ever been there for me because he is still my dad and nothing can change that, but i still wish their was a relationship with me and him. i hope everything works out for you. and if you need anyone to talk to you can im me even though you don't know me, it seems we have alot in commen. i hope to read more from you soon, comment on some of my writtings too if you don't mind, keep writting. -obaybegrlx-
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