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My safe place

my hood protectively over my head,
covering my aching eyes,
my cheeks are burning a fiery red,
hiding away from the lies.
laying face down in a darkened room,
there's nothing I can see,
hiding safely away from my gloom,
no ones there to frighten me.
I breathe in slowly a long deep breath,
I turn my anger into pain,
I close my eyes and think of death,
then shakily out again.
the light turns on I flinch and blink,
my heart clenches inside me,
my world has started to drift then sink,
no longer am I free.

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Written January 22nd, 2005

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  • Broken-Bones
    January 31, 2005
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    I like this alot especially the bit about the heart clenching !! its very well written and very strong !! Best wishes !!! well done on a good write !!

  • styx-angel
    January 29, 2005
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    wow...very vivid...i like it i hope you don't feel that way too often, because then that wouldnt be very good. lots of hugs from me!!! keep writing