Heart of my heart I see you
Every night in my dreams.
Are we to be denied our trove,
Risk the wrath of our King,
To be together my love?
Only a Prince I am to marry
For you are just a Knight.
They say we cannot be wed.
How I wish it were possible to
Escape from this life I lead.
As I wed my Prince this day,
Grief I will silently smother.
Evermore just a dream of
Secretly loving each other.
Joan Benecke Jan 22nd 2005
Author notes
True love is denied when two lovers cannot be together because of protocol and they have to live their lives without each other.
silver
Acrostic
Written January 22nd, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Many Choices - Acrostics by Prometheus.
300 points, ended February 15, 2005, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Only For Members Of Hugh Wyles Favourite’s Group # 16 by huguenauties.
550 points, ended July 27, 2007, 10 entries
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Dearest Aunty Joan
This is a splendid Acrostic and so romantic and sad. It touched my heart. Thank you for sharing with us.
Hugs and love,
Your loving niece,
Petratani xo
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Dear A/J
I haven't read this poem before. It's a very lovely Acrostic and so sad that the Princess and her Knight couldn't be together. They probably married her off to some kind of ogre a lot older than her.
Love Jen.
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Dear Bea,
This king would never stand in the way of true love.
Your sad tale is beautifully told, so much so that I did not realise it was an acrostic until I read your Author's note. That, surely is the mark of a well contrived acrostic and rhyming too!
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It's sad that those who think they are 'above us'
oft' thwart the best intentions of young lovers.
How often are those meaningful love-letters
destroyed when intercepted by their 'betters'.
How often is some lowly, lovelorn swain
refused access to his 'princess' again
and so she weeps, imprisoned in her tower,
to marry some old rascal, grim and sour.
How oft' possessive parents' cruel miscarriages
of justice lead their offspring into marriages
which, loveless, end in heartbreak and disaster
ignoring the dictates of Love, the Master.
If only parents, looking in the glass,
could see how frail is love when based on class!
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Applause, love and hugs, pity I can't vote for you. XXX Hugh (R.)
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Great job on this. I really loved the last 4 lines. They were the perfect ending to this poem. This was really beautiful, in a sad sort of way. I liked it.
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Thank you Melissa
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Congratulaions on your Silver trophy! This was very worthy of a trophy. It was a wonderful Acrostic with a wonderful story written inside. I felt the sorrow of not being able to be with the one you love. How sad.
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Wonderful acrostic. I really liked how you set this up. Great write and good luck in the contest.
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Wow! I've never been a fan of acrostic poems, because I've never seend one pulled off so elegnatly. I absolutly love this!!! What a great write
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Sad but beautiful
Most of us have this thing happen to them, Joan. A lot of people marry some one else when their heart is with another.
You have written the story of ages so beautifully.
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Well done
Dear Joan, what a sad story, but your telling is wonderful in this acrostic. Marriages were made this way in other times, and still are, in other cultures. You've put one woman's emotion into beautiful words.
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What a fantastic tale your've woven. Sad in the fact that they can not be together, but the love shines though it in majestic proportions. Very beautifully done hun. I love it! Hugs, Gypsy
P.S. Keep the angels around me please. Still having a bit of a battle here. Thank you for all your help hun.
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ouch!
The story is sad, and you have brought the pain beautifully out in your verses. It is amazing how you have managed to imbibe everything into an acrostic.
Very well written indeed.
Regards,
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Very sad, but beautifully written. I really like the story behind this poem. It's very sad when you can't be with the person you love. I loved this poem. And thank you for the comment on my poem.
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awesome, awesome, awesome.
Yvonne
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This is absolutely beautiful...and I am wishing sincere luck in the contest.
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um, BRAVO!!!!! this was amazing, proving just how talented you are, i can see where mia inherited her talents from
i really enjoyed this. love you A/J til
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What a beautiful poem
Joan,
Beautiful words you have written here. I felt a sense of loss in here. At least they found true love and can forever be with one another. Sorry, I don't have too much to say at the moment... love you lots and hope you are well. The best of luck in the contest.
With lots of love,
~ Kalen
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This is a wonderfully written acrostic. A bitter sad love story, not being able to be with the one you love. Excellent work.
Sam
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Oh Joan,
This is so tendering and touching, I know there are many who can relate to that love that was sacrificed. Memories do wane. Very beautiful! It naturally rolls off the tongue.
You have an extraordinary talent for these acrostics. If the first letters were not in bold I would think this was just splendid prose. Excellent! The best to you in this challenge.
I LOVE YOU
Sister/Friend
Renee 
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Wow, beautiful poem- kinda fantasy based too. Great write, keep writing because this great
Thanks for commenting on my poem
All the best,
Pozo
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Thank you darling Kim, I enjoyed creating it, I love Acrostics~Love~A/J
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Auntie Joan! I am stunned by the sheer beauty of this. That something that is very hard to capture in an acrostic I think. To make all the letters line up and pen lines that fit the theme is one thing but to create such beauty and elegance as you here, that is truly difficult to master. This is sheer elogence! Good luck in the contest!
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Thank you surfergirl, thank you for commenting on my acrostic, I do appreciate it~angelica
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Thank you sandy for your wonderful comment, I loved yours very much my sweet, good luck to you also~love~Joan
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Thank you prom, I enjoyed creating this acrostic~angelica
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Thank you dear Chris, well, you know us ladies, always looking for our Knight in shining armour, even though they do wear denim jeans I'd like to see some of your acrostics Chris, how about posting some~Lovesya~Joan and huggers to you
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This is so elegant! I loved reading it. Romantic and regal at the same time! Great job!
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BEAUTIFUL AN D HEARTFELT POEM
This was so beautiful Joan. You wrote a lovely story in acrostic form. Bravo, I love it.Best of luck in the contest, but I don't think you need any luck with this fabulous poem. God bless you. Take care, Sandy
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This is very beautiful. I love how you turned it into a story about a forbidden love. It's always sad when you cannot be with the one you truly love. You displayed all the emotions of that very well in this. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
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Very nice Joan, you ladies have a real thing about these old knights, today it’s knights in denim my friend and only the heart and smile that shines.
I’m a real old pro at these acrostics too, just never knew that’s what they were called (old age he blames quickly). I did a one a long time ago using the word inspiration, it went down a treat on my sites. I’ll have to add the word acrostic poem in the keywords now.
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Thank you dear Hugh for your wonderful comment and the help you gave me~Love~Bea 's and 's
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Inspired words.
Dear Joan,
This is a wonderful piece of writing. The spaced rhyming gives an authentic mediaeval flavour and the poem really expresses the grief of a king's daughter who must marry within her station and deny her true love.
The image you have chosen is perfect. I can imagine this poor, lovesick princess facing a loveless marriage, forlornly sending these thoughts to her knight.
I think this is one of the most feeling poems you have penned and it's construction and message are truly inspired. Applause.
Best of luck in this contest and in all you do.
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
Edited on Jan 22, 5:19 p.m. because 'typo coz of tears.'.
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