And he stood before eternity,
waiting for his love to arrive.
He was bound to be married today
to his first love.
She stood at the entrance
as the bride, and wife to be.
Then took her first steps to
living her dream.
They pledge together to
love and protect,
“till death us do part”.
A promise of a lifetime,
solid as the love they show today.
“You may kiss the bride”
Then their lips join and they
are one till death us do part,
and happily ever after.
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"Love is pure and great"
Written January 21st, 2005
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A very beautifully written piece and heartfelt. Thanks for entering. God bless you and Manisha, orionis for hosting this contest in my honor.
Then took her first steps to
living her dream ... I will do my very best to make Ashley's dreams come true.
Love and light,
Lencio -
Very beautiful. I wish everyone could end up like that. <3
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very fresh and innocent. it makes me want to believe in happy endings! great job
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Excellent Poem Of Love
I really enjoyed reading this awesome poem and was touched by the emotional outpouring of love you have for your special someone. The flow was smooth and the message came to life through my minds eye as the image was that of a Groom and Bride sharing their first kiss as Man and Wife. Great Job. I must now Thank You for sharing your glowing talent of poetry and a little of your wonderful creative personality with the world and your readers. I have a little favor to ask of you as I part. Would you please keep your fingers stroking those keyboard keys creating more of your beautiful poetry for everyone please. Your Reading Fan, MickPigknuckles
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crystaldust 26-01-05 22:07
Good little poem, this.I like it. It's fresh, starry-eyed and the words and form are absolutely right for a wedding ceremony. -
It's ok you didn't offend, i just couldn't see your point, i mean a lot of loves at the begginning. Thanks again.
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Sorry, I didn't mean to offend. Re-reading it now, you're right, there are only two. I'm not sure why it stuck in my mind as being more, I just got the feeling there was as I was reading it.
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Thanks for the suggestion but i think it's fine as it is thanks. Also there wer're only two "loves" at the beginning so thats hardly a lot is it?
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Aww very beautifully penned.Love is a beautiful thing.I hope you do enjoy your happily ever after.The poem described a wonderful wedding and two people who are very much in love.Nicely written,I can tell it's from your heart.
Kudos and Blessings,Tom -
it's really sweet...gentle, soft...so loving, so full of innocent desire. did he read it? i hope that your dreams come true...beautiful write!
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i really like this poem! i'm not so used to the happy ending poems around here. so its a breath of fresh air! maybe instead of saying "lover" as mellor said you could say "true love" idk. overall i thought it is very sweet!
<3 Jessica -
This was sweet. A little unusual to describe in a short poem such as this, a wedding.
My one criticism is "waiting for his love to arrive", might sound better if it was "waiting for his lover to arrive". Might be this gives off the wrong message, and fair enough, I just felt there were a lot of "love"s used near the beginning.
Brilliant, well done x
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