People... want to be... so alone
They feel like dying
Like nothing is left for them
...and...
Have you forgotten how good life is?
Did you really forget?
...did you forget what it's like to wake on a Summer Morning
...to see the bright sky and the warmth of the sun
To smile at it all..
...have you forgotten how to be happy
Did you really forget that people want to be there with you...
...I want to show you that day
That sun
To stand with you in that light
To spread that warmth
And lay out in the sunlight
...can you really stand to be in the dark...
...it's so cold...
It's so lonely
and I can't feel anything in there...
I can't feel you
I can't feel myself
...because there is no light
no warmth
...don't forget about the sun
don't forget about me
don't forget about the light I have for you
please don't forget the warm days
and also the warm nights
even the moon shines with us on your smile
I only want... to brighten... your day...
Danteku Mitsugi: *is able to stop*
PhoenixSer: you should turn that explanation into another song or poem
-Dan
Author notes
Basically, PhoenixSer asked me what I meant exactly, as I brought it up with her, about my last poem, Don't Forget The Sun. And this came out, almost as poetically as the song itself... I nearly cried again. -Dan
Written January 20th, 2005
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oh, don't cry! you'll make me all unhappy! my comment here is basically like on the other... we all need a little ray of sunshine and our own place of warmth that gives us hope... without hope where would we be? well written, my friend. write on
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awe youre so sweet... i love your work.. youre totally hagard.. i love this it really makes me think!
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Very good
Well yeah, some time everyone has to feel like that. No one can be happy ALL the time...well maybe if they are with you then its different...thats all I have to say to that. <3 Wolfie -
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Aw, Dan.. This is a lovely explanation. And it's so true.
So many people forget what it's like to be happy..forget what life's about. Hopefully this poem will remind them of what they've turned a blind eye to. 
Great job.
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great poem! i loved it! keep up the good writing, hope to see more really soon!
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I wrote a piece a lot like this. I know exactly how you feel, I just wish that you'd be able to talk to me more. Wonderful job hon.
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That's really good hun. Sounds like me to a couple of my friends
Wonderful job
~~Jessica
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