I still remember the day that we met;
So many memories I'll never forget.
I still remember the tears that you cried
The day I thought that you'd be my bride.
You were so frightened and hung your head.
I pulled you close and quietly said
I will be the shoulder
that catches all your tears.
I will be the one
who conquers all your fears.
I will be the man
to stand beside you through the years
If ever you need me
I will be here.
I still remember your kerchief of lace;
The one you used to dry your face.
I still remember the touch of your hand
as I quietly whispered "I understand."
With one last kiss you turned away,
but before you left, I just had to say
I will be the shoulder
that catches all your tears.
I will be the one
who conquers all your fears.
I will be the man
to stand beside you through the years
If ever you need me
I will be here.
I still remember all of you
replaying my memories, keeping them new.
I still remember the words I said.
I keep repeating them here in my head,
hoping somehow, though you aren't near
deep in your heart, somehow you'll hear
I will still be the shoulder
that catches all your tears.
I will still be the one
who conquers all your fears.
I will still be the man
to stand beside you through the years
If ever you need me
I'm still here
because I still love you.......
Author notes
My first attempt at writing from the male perspective.
A contest entry
- Enter Something You Really Like by Andy Stephenson.
300 points, ended July 6, 2005, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Hello luv! Nice write! Writing from the male perspective is rather a whole new world. I've tried it a few times myself! Call me sometime...I'd love to hear from you! Good attempt! Keep it up!!!
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The explanation helped in understanding the song. I was playing around with some melodies. While "still" in the last refrain of the chorus may add to the story, it definitely places a challenge on the melody there.
Andy -
ok to answer your questions. first. she loved him but was not yet ready to marry him. she was scared and didn't know how he would take it. he let her go, and wants her to know that he will always love her, no matter what. no i don't have a melody for it yet. i am still working on that part. if you have any other questions, just let me know. thnx for your comments
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I need explanation on this one. Did she not want to marry him, and why? If they did marry, why did they separate? I like the chorus. Have you got a melody to go with it? Anyway, let me know.
Andy -
Woooooow.... this is a great poem. I dunno how to even describe it... It's really good. I love how you say about catching their tears, and I know exactly how that is, because I fell for this girl who was head over heels for a guy that did nothing but hurt her, and I was always there for her. This poem puts those feelings I had at that time onto paper perfectly.
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Cliche topic, cliche rhyme scheme...and somehow you managed to come out with an amazing write!! Now THAT, right there, is TRUE talent, my friend! To be able to take something that has been done a million times before and make it your own...oh yes, you just earned my vote! heh
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great
wow, these rhymes are amazing i love these lines and remind me the way i feel about the someone i like...i love this poem is very catchy and well written..excellent -
Not much to say about this one But wow. Haven't read anything by you in awhile sorry.
Wonderful write.
God bless
mary -
beautiful beautiful poem!
this captures real emotion, and romance..which is very hard to do, without sounding 'mushy'..but you pulled it off with great ease!
I still remember all of you
replaying my memories, keeping them new.
I still remember the words I said.
I keep repeating them here in my head,
hoping somehow, though you aren't near
deep in your heart, you can still hear
this is awesome!!~bravo~~~
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That is such a sweet poem. I am amazed at your skill of writing from the viewpoint of the other gender. It was so sweet and tender I just "awwwwed" all the way through. It was sad that in the poem she said no. It would be so amazing and romantic to hear a man say those words and mean it. I love the rhyme, which is by far not one of my best talents. it is so sweet, and I just love, love, love the refrain.
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That was really great!!!!
I loved this:
"I will be the shoulder
that catches all your tears.
I will still be the one
who conquers all your fears.
I will still be the man
to stand beside you through the years
If ever you need me
I'm still here"
SOOOOO pretty!
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Aww, this poem so cute and sad. "I'm still here because I still love you......." That part is amazing, love is so important, keep up the great work!
~Shantell~ -
this is very beautiful and very sad... I love the meter of the poem... good job!
S~
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This is very good I really liked it. May I print this off? IF you would like check out some of my stuff.... you dont have to, but just a suggestion.... good write
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wow i love this poem...i can feel all of the emotions and it fits in very well with the categories you picked for it...i love the flow and the words you chose great write.... -
this poem does a broken heart good to read. it shows that there is true, and honest love, even if it isnt appreciated, awesome poem. its what i needed to read, thank you.
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Aw, that is an incredibly cute poem, you did an awesome job writing it, it's wonderfully written and very adorable
lol anyhow great job, keep up the good work
Tins <3 -
To have someone write these kind of words to you would surely melt the coldest heart. Lovely poem that paints a vivid picture.(way to go) ...mal
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i liked the poem but not the colour of the writting kind of made it hard to read but i did anyway because i liked there rhyming
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i am chic. this was wwritten for a contest about a pic.
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good
That's so sad. I've never actually seen a guy write a sappy love poem...good job. Keep it up and you might just redeam your sex's name. -
That was so sad and beautiful. Wow. What a great poem. Write on. ~*~SpydurPoet~*~
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so sweet and sad...I liked your repetition too...your rhyming was also very nice...great job and thanx for entering
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Great Job
Wow you have shown such strong words here in this wonderful write. I like it and you have done an awesome job. Keep up the good work. Thank you for sharing this with my family and I. -
I very nicely written love poem. I can tell it came from the heart, deep within you like all good writes. The only little problem I see is the "rythem of it in places but I do the same thing.
~~~~Love and Light~~~~
~~Blaze~~
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I agree with the above comments. i liked the talking repetition if that makes anysence. but yea that part of the poem really made it worth the read for me as well as the subject. the poem itself seemed really tragic to me =\
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Very sweet love song!
Lovely poem of love, devotion and this was soooooo sweet - to hear such words from your lover must be the most wonderful experience (ask me, I know
)!! I loved the singing quality of the poem and the repetition of the stanzas (the lyrics) emphasized the feelings of true love. The vocabulary was simple, yet effective and the rhyming flowed with ease. Very lovely and heartwarming to read something as soft and gentle as this love that you've painted here with the soft chalk of your heart! Best wishes and good luck in the contest!
~ Nicolette
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This is very sweet and touching. Clever word usage and flow. When looking at the picture you chose, I probably never would've thought of something like this, but now that you've written about it - I think that this is a very unique take on it. Great work and thank you for entering my contest!
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tremendously touching
This is absolutely the most entrancing poem I have ever read. I completely agree with thesegreywalls.... I would never let anyone go if they ever said that to me...that is so touching.
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this is great! i am impressed with your writing
the fact that you've written this poem from a man's point of view, told a man's story of heartbreak, to me, is a sign of a great writer. if you can write of a situation you've never been in and do it well... you can write!
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if some one said that to me you would have to shoot me to get me off of him.
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very good choice of words... i had goosebumps by the second paragraph!! good luck in the contest, thanx for sharin!
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compelling, engaging and otherwise a wonderful poem. i have problems with the syl. counts...metrically speaking i thot it could flow a bit better, but i'm old an i limp a bit anyway. but other than that your heart shows through brilliantly. Good luck in the contest.Blessings and bes wishes, ~richard
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this is beautiful..and i totally agree with your authors comment..this is the kind of guy that we are all looking for...it would be amazing to have a guy say those words and mean them...best of luck in the contest...God Bless
tyler -
Great
This is really sweet and a moving poem. Great use of rhyme and I liked the meter. It really reads like a song! I was a little confused through the first read as to what was happening, but I caught up. All in all an excellent write.
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Hey!! Great job! This is really awesome! You did a great job showing all the emotions. I actually had a guy tell me this and now...hes gone...but i know he still loves me! But I gotta run time for church! Byes! Always, Sam
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thats so romantic and touching! i wish i knew the background information behind it cause some of the parts i didnt understand but i still liked it anyway keep up the good work love ya chelle
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it reminded me of the highway man which is my all time favourite poem. I dont now why it did i think it may have been the whole line about the lace. awsome work!
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very sweet. and sad at the same time. good job with writing this. was worth the read. good luck.
Blu -
Oh, Elizabeth, this is SOOO sweet and beautiful! At first I thought you were talking about Caleb again, and then all of a sudden you said "The day I thought that you'd be my bride," I was like...What a sec...She's not gay! lol Then I realized that you weren't talking about yourself...
I feel stupid now...
Anyways, this is an absolute gorgeous piece. I love the the chorus, of course, because I'm looking for someone like that. I think we all are, actually! lol Well, wonderful piece you have here. Good luck in the contest.
Elizabeth
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picks jaw off the floor That was the most incredibly beautiful poem I've read in forever. There's nothing else to say, nothing wrong with this at all. Beautiful.
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