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I tried..

I tried,

Who knows how I helped
…if I helped
 But I never knew
   
      Your thoughts mirrored mine
My voice,
         Speechless

My words at a halt
   Have I even helped?

Did I stand solid
 When you stood alone

Did you face me with truth
And understand I felt ashamed
   Understand the worry that trembled
beneath the surface

I’m sorry,
   I couldn’t lend that helpful hand
Say those magic words
                    that make life better

Author notes

Well, you asked for our thoughts and these are mine. I pretty new to the group and haven't really done much. My teen preci0usd0rk is the greatest and its been a lot of fun to get to know her. earlier this week though another teen needed help and I was the first to respond to her. Its fairly easy for me to help people in real life, but online... its so hard. You can' offer them a hug or see their expressions... I was just so worried I'd say something wrong.
Written January 20th, 2005

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  • Ghoest
    January 23, 2005
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    I love how honest this piece is. It really shows your fear as well as your strength and desire to help. It was well worded. I can definitely relate to the worry one gets anytime we have to give advice....did you say the right thing... is it going to help...is it going to hurt. Things are so uncertain any time we give advice. It's good that you are strong enough to still be there to help when you are needed. Great write, and thanks for the comment on my piece.

  • Grey Void
    January 22, 2005
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    i'm not a mentor but i try to help the people close to me out, and i can relate to that poem more than i wish to but it was beatifull.(too bad i can't spell)


  • coolmommy
    January 22, 2005
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    wow, powerful, i really like dthis, great job, bravo bravo! keep it up!


  • kirbysman Moderators member
    January 21, 2005
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    Hey, Erika, great write and great that you're helping. It's a wonderful feeling to know you've helped someone. Malz in my "grandaughter" so she's very special to me too and glad you entered her contest. Paul

  • Malzy
    January 21, 2005
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    Hey
    I believe thats one thing most of our mentors feel, the feeling of helplessness or uselessness(if those are even words) when someone needs help and you arent even there to give them a hug or look them in the eye and tell them it'll be alright. But we do what we can do and hopefully its a step up from where theyre coming from anyways. I wanted to thank you for entering and wish you the best of luck. Thanks!
    Mal


  • cutiepie gold member
    January 20, 2005
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    Great

    we have the tools at our disposal to hug on-line. A simple goes a long way or else a to let them know you care. if you go to the help section it will show you how to make "emotions" or else im me and I can show you the few I know ....We all have doubts of our ability but half the battle is wanting to help You have shown how much you care by this poem. It was a truthful statement and thats all anyone can ask for
    Edited on Jan 20, 4:28 p.m. because 'error'.

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